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  1. Date: 12/3/2013 7:08:00 PM
    Okies this is perfect for a haibun, just write the story laid out in prose and put in 1 or 2 haiku [a good place for a haiku would be after where he tells you to get a bucket!] then the end. I can help you if you'd like? Light & Love

  1. Date: 6/22/2013 8:16:00 PM
    Oh Caleb ...what a memorable moment...for you both...and that rattler was it? Did you go on one of those hunts or find it in the road? You are so awesome a dad..have you taken him snipe hunting yet? What a writer and story teller you are..

  1. Date: 6/9/2013 10:04:00 AM
    Very endearing and nostalgic. The vivid imagery painting the scene I very much enjoyed being taken there with you as much as you enjoyed telling it :)

  1. Date: 6/7/2013 2:34:00 PM
    This is very cute, Caleb. I think you should write a book about all your many interesting experiences in your lifetime,which really isn't such a long life yet. Imagine what you will have accumlated before age 60! This was one I had not seen yet and now I think I am caught up.

  1. Date: 6/6/2013 11:44:00 AM
    I guess the message in this poem goes for everyone.Somdtimes we need to learn from our own experiences.Security is a nice stepping stone for kids but at tomes We have to let go a letting them slip and fall in mud to watch them stsnd.Swesome writer

  1. Date: 6/6/2013 6:42:00 AM
    This is awesome :) beautiful indeed.

  1. Date: 6/6/2013 6:04:00 AM
    great pacing of plot with imaginative language, mood and setting... your narration about father-son relationship speaks in charming ways .. grreat work!..:)

  1. Date: 6/5/2013 10:22:00 PM
    You haven't posted anything new in a while, and here you are posting 5 new ones... awesome! You are such an amazing story-teller Caleb. And whether or not this was real or made up it felt totally genuine to me. You wrote it in such a way that was endearing but not cheesy... not a word wasted! Glad to see you back :)

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    Date: 6/5/2013 10:25:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Faving this one!
  1. Date: 6/5/2013 7:56:00 PM
    This is very well written, informative without appearing moralistic, easy on the heart but totally memorable, blessings from my home to yours Caleb, you father him well, xxx

  1. Date: 6/4/2013 12:38:00 PM
    That is such a brilliant and sweet connection between a father and son. Lessons to be passed down and learned in life :)

  1. Date: 6/4/2013 6:59:00 AM
    - Lessons to learn ... He got answers to his questions. - One nice father and son poem, Caleb. - Were the fish on the hook? - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

  1. Date: 6/3/2013 5:48:00 PM
    Too cute! And I'm sure he will teach his future son the same lesson! That is, unless Grandpa Caleb decides to teach it first haha.