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Passionate Smile

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Below is the poem entitled Passionate Smile which was written by poet Richard Lamoureux. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

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Passionate Smile

I look at you with a knowing smile
Sometimes we don't even need our words
You prepare your arms for my embrace
My smile is transformed into a kiss

Sometimes we don't even need our words
I cannot take my eyes off of your lips
My smile is transformed into a kiss
The passion within begins to grow

I cannot take my eyes off of your lips
Nothing but a slave to my desire
The passion within begins to grow
We press together feeling the heat

Nothing but a slave to my desire
You prepare your arms for my embrace
We press together feeling the heat
I look at you with a knowing smile


First attempt at this form, this is a challenging one.
Thanks to Manel Gunatillake for introducing me to this form.

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  1. Date: 5/19/2013 12:32:00 PM
    Very beautiful. Well written. AO

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 5/19/2013 6:09:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks A.O
  1. Date: 5/19/2013 12:20:00 PM
    I liked the extension... I believe you are well on your way on getting the hang of this form! In a way it comes as no surprise... your skill with the terzanelle is very effortless (and the pantoum has similar repetition requirements)...

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 5/19/2013 6:10:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    I have tried a few more, I really like this form
  1. Date: 5/19/2013 1:50:00 AM
    you are making waves for your first attempt at this form, richard... pantuoms are hrad to do, but you made it witha delicate theme and rhythmic sway... you may want to strrtch it for more than 2 stanzas, there are some good pantuoms here on soup... well done, my friend!..:)

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 5/19/2013 6:19:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, I was following the example on soup so kept it the same length. When I am feeling more ambitious I will try again.
  1. Date: 5/19/2013 12:56:00 AM
    I think you did a good job of it. You chose a sweet topic too. Like Timothy says below here, typically they are four stanzas or longer. But great first pantoum.

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 5/19/2013 6:20:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Andrea
  1. Date: 5/19/2013 12:39:00 AM
    Very nicely done, Richard! And yes, I believe you have followed the pattern correctly. Typically they extend to four stanzas of four lines each (three stanzas is fine as well... I just don't see them very often). Some even carry it onto extreme numbers (like 8 or 10 stanzas). Depends on how far you wanna go with it. If you want to read a poem, which in my opinion, is one of the greatest pantoums I've read, check out He Was My Sun by Terry O'leary, here on P-Soup.

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 5/19/2013 6:22:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Tim, this is good information.
  1. Date: 5/18/2013 10:04:00 PM
    I didn't see your foot note. Thank you my dearest you have elevated me. My next poem will be a pantoum as tribute to you.

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 5/19/2013 6:22:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    It is my pleasure.
  1. Date: 5/18/2013 9:29:00 PM
    fantastic. you have got it right. you have chosen a good theme for a pantoum. Have you felt the music in it. Lovely theme. Thank you for your comments on my poem. Love and hugs

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 5/19/2013 6:24:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks for this generous comment.
  1. Date: 5/18/2013 8:20:00 PM
    words just flow.take care

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 5/19/2013 6:24:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Colleen
  1. Date: 5/18/2013 6:36:00 PM
    Richard...how do you make everything LOOK so easy. This was beautiful and flowing and for a first...it's just amazing. The content is so sweet as well.

    Manassian Avatar Eileen Manassian
    Date: 5/18/2013 6:54:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Well....that makes me happy! :)
    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 5/18/2013 6:53:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, I am glad you like it, hopefully I got it right. You have made my day with your enthusiastic comment.:0)