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picture perfect

this was his chance
a picnic to seduce her
in the meadow
   where the last girl was buried
   he spread out the red blanket...

for "the picture perfect" contest

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  1. Date: 10/22/2013 6:48:00 PM

    Full of suspense and horror in so few lines. Great job!

  1. Date: 8/22/2013 9:05:00 PM

    CONGRATULATIONS SUSAN,, Picture awesome Perfect. LOVE ~SKAT~

  1. Date: 8/22/2013 8:03:00 PM

    nice win... always..PD

  1. Date: 8/22/2013 3:07:00 PM

    Susan, even without imagery being used very much , the "story" that this evokes leaves such an impression on the mind! For me, this is GREAT tanka. WEll, I don't know if I understand anything about tanka, but I sure love it. Congrats!!

  1. Date: 8/22/2013 2:51:00 PM

    Wonderful piece...Congrats on your win...

  1. Date: 8/22/2013 2:48:00 PM

    Reminds me of an old movie I just watched.......yikes !! Twilight Zone fodder !

  1. Date: 8/22/2013 12:12:00 PM

    This sent chills, congrats!

  1. Date: 6/11/2013 11:53:00 PM

    If Alfred Hitchcock were alive today, he would present a show based on this write. Congratulations, this is a good one.

  1. Date: 6/11/2013 10:49:00 AM

    Wow, this is scary!! You're good at these Tankas!

  1. Date: 6/11/2013 4:03:00 AM

    Congratulations. Rick

  1. Date: 6/10/2013 9:51:00 PM

    congrats on your win Susan

  1. Date: 6/10/2013 7:00:00 PM

    It doesn't take many words to scare us.........terrific piece!!

  1. Date: 6/10/2013 2:07:00 PM

    congrats in Roy's contest............. SKAT

  1. Date: 6/10/2013 1:24:00 PM

    Short and scary , well done Susan congratulations love xx

  1. Date: 6/10/2013 12:56:00 PM

    Congratulations on the win. I'll be posting a blog with additional comments. Cheers, Roy

  1. Date: 5/1/2013 1:20:00 PM

    Ups! A chilling Write here,Susan.Scary but very Nice one:-) Unfortunately..there will be no picnic this..LOL

  1. Date: 4/28/2013 2:02:00 AM

    soupmail. I need HELP

  1. Date: 4/26/2013 8:09:00 AM

    Dear Susan - My favorite of the week. What a concept. Thanks for your comment and I am fine. I've got you in my favorites list, but have have been slow to pull it up. I don't see you at PFT anymore, but may not recognize you without "Black-Eyed" love you, kathy

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  1. Date: 4/23/2013 8:35:00 AM

    Good morning Susan, hope you are well?? and drinking all the chicken soup... wink! anyways, I'm only stopping by cuz I haven't heard from you in such a long long time.... I'm wondering if you have forgotten me. well i better let you go, I'm leaving work early today. LOL, and thank you for the nice and lovely hi on my Facebook this morning... I'm still waiting for this to be my day. I mean that is what you said ...:-) wink! wink! luv~PD

  1. Date: 4/23/2013 7:37:00 AM

    Yikes! Love this, Susan!...have you been watching me picnic?....haha

  1. Date: 4/22/2013 6:03:00 PM


  1. Date: 4/22/2013 4:29:00 PM

    This is a scary one..Reads like a winner for the meadow contest..Thanks for stopping by..The Male Cardinal that I saw is brightly colored a deep red with the contrasting black..The Female is a very dull color more of a faded brown with just a touch of red with some black..Sara

  1. Date: 4/22/2013 2:46:00 PM

    oh wow, FAVE!!!!!

  1. Date: 4/22/2013 2:11:00 PM

    Macabre, errie and wonderfully wicked. Such a simple scene yet twisted effortlessly almost Poe like.

  1. Date: 4/22/2013 10:12:00 AM

    Eek! Well this gave me chills! You mix such a happy image of a picnic with the horribleness of a dead body beneath... you know how to surprise the reader! Appeals to the Stephen King fan in me.

  1. Date: 4/22/2013 2:05:00 AM

    Unique approach by you Susan.Enjoyed this tanka.

  1. Date: 4/21/2013 6:40:00 PM

    that's a scary thought... lol great thriller!

  1. Date: 4/21/2013 3:46:00 PM

    love this creepy tanka, Susan. Hope you are feeling good now

  1. Date: 4/21/2013 3:23:00 PM

    How Steven King. Speaks of such darkness that lurks within the soul. That's why we pray to save the day so wickedness can't take it's toll. Peace. :) It sure wasn't in the meadow we can build a snowman. :)