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Summer and the River

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Summer and the River


	
		
	Summer, 
	the Guadalupe River, 
	at least a couple of decades ago...
 	
	A bend in any river,
	no matter how slowly that river flows, 
	erodes the outside of that bend, 
	digs away at the bank, 
	separating stones from sand, 
	nudging them into shallow water 
	across and down the river, 
	sorting them by size as it goes, 
	the smaller, rounder ones 
	in a layer on top. 
	
	That’s where I was that summer afternoon, 
	on my back, half-submerged in the gravel shallows, 
	the water so warm I couldn’t feel it, 
	my arms straight out from my body,
	interrupting the flow, 
	causing almost waves
	as the water washed over. 
	My ears were under water; 
	I could hear only the flow of water around me. 
	Above me the leaves and branches 
	of trees overhanging the river 
	moved gracefully in the hot breeze. 
	Somehow the leaves and branches and water 
	moved at the same tempo, 
	not like music, 
	but rather a deep humhmmm 
	I could both see and feel. 

	I don’t know how long 
	I hovered in that flow, 
	but it wasn’t long enough. 
	In ways I can’t describe 
	I’m still there, 
	bathed in that most elemental of mediums, 
	moving with the leaves, 
	lost in a very long moment.

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  1. Date: 8/5/2013 12:59:00 AM
    Very nice poem, Beautifully written.=)

  1. Date: 7/28/2013 2:13:00 PM
    An awesome poem, Jack, and well worthy of its first placement. Well done, my friend. This poem rocks!! Licia :-)

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 7/28/2013 3:22:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you, Delysia. I especially like the "rocks" comment... Jack
  1. Date: 7/27/2013 5:30:00 AM
    A beautiful Zen moment in time. Enjoyed this one Jack. Congratulations on your superb win. Well deserved. Warm Smiles, Connie

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 7/27/2013 8:25:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    I hadn't thought of it that way, but it was one of those moments. Thanks for reminding me, and thanks for the comment... Jack
  1. Date: 7/25/2013 9:52:00 PM
    hello, Jack the poem is hot and Awesome... congrats with your summer time poem...love Linda

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 7/25/2013 10:11:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    You're quite welcome, and thank you for your ongoing support... Jack
  1. Date: 7/25/2013 6:28:00 PM
    I was lost in the peace and depth of this beautiful poetic story. A joy to read. Congratulations on your well deserved win :)

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 7/25/2013 9:51:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, Karen. It calms me just to remember being there... Jack
  1. Date: 7/25/2013 12:47:00 AM
    Congratulations on your winning spot Jack xx

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 7/25/2013 5:46:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you, Mandy... Jack
  1. Date: 7/24/2013 4:52:00 PM
    Congratulations Jack, you and the world as one. Great poem. I used to play in the river as a kid, only the shallowest part where the pike didn't go. Take care, Richard

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 7/24/2013 5:14:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you, Richard. Playing in the river is fun regardless of age... Jack
  1. Date: 7/24/2013 1:50:00 PM
    Jack - I have read a lot of your poems and in my humble opinion this is one of your very best...The last verse just blew me away...I like to call these 'perfect moments'...Steinback wrote of such a moment at the end of 'Cannery Row'...Nothing special, just Doc washing dishes after a rollicking party...This poem is quite similar to that...Congrats - Tim

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 7/24/2013 3:36:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you for the wonderful reply, Tim. As you can no doubt tell, it was a unique experience and one I'll never forget... Jack
  1. Date: 7/24/2013 1:43:00 PM
    this evokes summer perfectly! congratulations on your well-deserved win!

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 7/24/2013 3:32:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you, Ilene. I'm glad you enjoyed it... Jack
  1. Date: 7/24/2013 12:19:00 PM
    CONGRATULATIONS JACK, I chose this poem, and it's imagery. I know this river. It might had been a dream, a very graceful memory. thank you for sharing your summer time moment. the water flow sight and sound were the perfect and favorite moment of your poem. LUV* SKAT

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 7/24/2013 12:39:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you for selecting my poem. I'm quite happy and honored... Jack
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    Date: 7/24/2013 12:21:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    ps. the first 3 lines, had me at grip............. good going with the introduction.
  1. Date: 4/28/2013 7:22:00 AM
    You bring the vivid imagery and weave the words into life. I love the feeling of being right there inside the poem while reading. Excellent

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 4/28/2013 9:03:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you, Karen.
  1. Date: 4/28/2013 3:03:00 AM
    Lovely sensory description here. I often reflect on those seemingly magical times where time seems to stand still.

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 4/28/2013 9:02:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you, Kirin. I appreciate the comment. Unfortunately, that doesn't happen very often, for me at least.
  1. Date: 4/24/2013 4:45:00 PM
    I loved this lazy drifting down the river with you. It brought back childhood memories of my endless days on the Burdekin River.

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 4/24/2013 5:41:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Australia! The Guadalupe is in Texas, near San Antonio, and famous for "tubing," floating down the river in a tire inner tube. Thanks for your comment... Jack
  1. Date: 4/23/2013 7:11:00 AM
    Jack...love the picture! Seems I've been there too.

  1. Date: 4/22/2013 9:05:00 AM
    A deep embrace of the gifted seasons. The atmosphere on this held me very close to my heart. Thank you for this.

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 4/22/2013 10:43:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    You're welcome, and thank you for the nice comment... Jack
  1. Date: 4/21/2013 12:40:00 PM
    This is so cool, Jack. Though a little less nature-themed I've had similar feelings while doing the back stroke in a lap pool. There's something strangely hypnotic about the sound of water in your ears, while staring into a void. I wish I could lose myself in a very long moment... that was such a clever way of putting it!

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 4/21/2013 2:36:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    I hadn't thought about it before you mentioned it, but I do seem to write a lot about water. Hmmm... Jack
  1. Date: 4/21/2013 11:12:00 AM
    Absolutely lovely. Hang on to this one..I can see it winning in an upcoming contest... BG

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 4/21/2013 11:22:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Icertainly will. Thanks for the advice... Jack