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Scarin' Hippies- Part One

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Scarin' Hippies- Part One

Take a moment to forget what you are doing and join two brothers in the woods....

We are in the Ozarks hunting turkey. The land is bordered by national forest and criss-crossed by trails. These trails are a popular place for hikers, trail-riders, and backpackers to enjoy the natural beauty of the mountains. It is on one of these trails that we spy three hippies, (no offense intended...I love hippies) making their way to the cliffs where one can get a good view of the waterfall. I know right away that I can't let the opportunity to converse with hippies slip past me. So, when they have gotten rather too close, we step out on the path. Imagine, if you will, walking up a peaceful mountain trail, thinking of the beauty around you, listening to the springs glide down gentle slopes and jagged cliffs, and believing that there isn't another person for miles around. Then, two large men in leaf-suits with faces painted black and green step in front of you, seemingly out of nowhere. You can understand now, the reaction of three unsuspecting hippies. The first hippie freezes in his tracks and gives a short, sharp, "Ah!". The second hippie, who is a female, makes some sort of awful squeaking sound that resembles a baby rabbit being eaten by coyotes. The last hippie, with a quickness that is quite impressive, considering he is higher than the mountain, turns ... and runs. I am far too entertained by the events unfolding to say anything, but my brother isn't.
"Whoa! Whoa! Calm down. We're just hunting ... didn't mean to scare ya."
"Yes we did." I think.
While the first two push their hearts back down their throats, the running hippie makes his way back in shame, and I know it's time to win them over......

*Yes, I know this is nothing more than a story, but it was fun for me to look back on and write. Plus, it isn't all that long, so I thought I would post it. Part two will be up shortly.

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  1. Date: 7/7/2013 10:18:00 AM
    Caleb, I am captivated by your awesome stories. Thank you for sharing... I love hippies too :)

  1. Date: 4/25/2013 10:54:00 AM
    PS what you are writing is called PROSE POETRY so do not apologize! It could also be called a [a vignette is a short impressionistic scene that focuses on one moment or gives a trenchant impression] LOL..why can't you be my age? To me you seem no more than 25 LOL I loved throwing those long handled axes double handed! pimpkins make a BIG explosion!..and yes we should just write of bunnies and bare arses, oh oh and kittens & crotchs!! Light & Love

  1. Date: 4/18/2013 1:51:00 AM
    It's quite entertaining so far... I will continue onto part 2...

  1. Date: 4/14/2013 6:06:00 PM
    You must have been a sight armed and in camouflage. This is a lot of fun. You are also a very productive writer with a very bright future.

  1. Date: 4/11/2013 7:08:00 AM
    Cute one got a chuckle..Glad that I found it to read this morn..Sara

  1. Date: 4/11/2013 6:10:00 AM
    Caleb this is acceptable and in your case, more than acceptable, material for Soup. I would label it as "narrative" because it is precisely just that. I recall you telling me you ran into hippies. How fun.

  1. Date: 4/11/2013 6:10:00 AM
    And gosh, if someone ever does a hippy contest here, you are all set.

  1. Date: 4/10/2013 1:37:00 PM
    Finally! I've been waiting for this hippie tale! You could be a very successful short story writer, Caleb. This is fantastic. My favourite line was "...with a quickness that is quite impressive, considering he is higher than the mountain." You gave me a good laugh with that one, so thank you!

    Smith Avatar Caleb Smith
    Date: 4/10/2013 1:50:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Dude was fast for a not ever having a hippie run away from me, on what basis am I making that judgement?...ha
  1. Date: 4/10/2013 1:29:00 PM
    ON MAN!!!! Hurry up with part two! Poor sweet hippies! Naughty you! ;)Well...will have to wait to see what happens.

    Smith Avatar Caleb Smith
    Date: 4/10/2013 1:44:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    haha...the three hippies will not soon forget the crazy men of the mountain...