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Fireflies

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Fireflies

It's so dark outside, my eyes can't distinguish where sand meets water. Somehow, dusk has come and gone, plunging the evening into darkness. 
 
But even as my eyes yield to this opaque absence of light, my other senses heighten. I can hear the crash of waves as they abuse the shoreline, sending foaming water up the beach in icy streams. I'm lulled by the sound of polished pebbles colliding like marbles as they recede with the waves. I can feel the sea's cool mist against my face, taste its salt on my lips. The scent of seaweed drifts on the breeze in gentle wafts - and then, slowly, the faintest whiff of smoke.   

I glance over my shoulder, where a tiny dot of light penetrates the darkness. It's a beacon on this cool night, and I walk slowly toward it, digging my toes into the soft sand with each step.


dim moonlight peeks through thinning clouds-- fire crackles
He's still there, stoking the fire, feeding the flames until the heat is tangible. The air wavers between us like a veil - a line I want to cross. He stirs up clouds of smoke, stirring feelings within me as I watch his busy hands. I wait patiently for him to notice my approach, and when he does, my breath catches.
rainbow flames burst from seasoned maple-- blue eyes sparkle
I watch golden light flicker across his skin, softening the lines of his face. He abandons his task, moving around the fire until he stands before me, smiling as if he knows my heart is thundering in my chest. He waits for a painstaking moment to pass. Then he kisses me with toasted marshmallow lips, pulling me down into his lap to watch the sparks rise like fireflies into the breathless night.

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  1. Date: 4/24/2013 7:27:00 PM
    Heather, congratulations with your poem on Andrea's, favorite list. always~ Linda

  1. Date: 4/23/2013 6:17:00 AM
    Loved it and love it again...Congrats, Heather....marshmallow lips...ha...sticky.

  1. Date: 4/22/2013 10:55:00 PM
    Oh wow. Many congrats dear friend.

  1. Date: 4/11/2013 12:15:00 PM
    BTW...........NEVER EVEN HEARD OF A HAIBUN....How ignorant am I???? ;)

  1. Date: 4/11/2013 12:14:00 PM
    Heather...I was there!!! It was so good...the wording so perfect...I walked along the beach with you! The marshmallow kiss was all yours, baby! ;) Honestly though...I'm awed by your work! Goes to my favorites! Hugs!....I want to write more and more...in praise of this! OK OK ...I'll shut! Great work!

  1. Date: 4/4/2013 11:26:00 PM
    Heather, this is an exceptional haibun! I like wot Caleb mentions in his comment, regarding the flow. There are a lot of minute details, but they flow along smoothly. I think haibun is a strong-suit of yours. I believe this form is helping you to become a better writer and poet.

  1. Date: 4/4/2013 4:34:00 AM
    Very romantic..as if somehow i travelledvyhis journey already..going to my favs...

  1. Date: 4/4/2013 4:32:00 AM
    Very romantic..as if somehow i travelledvyhis journey already..going to my favs...

  1. Date: 4/3/2013 10:48:00 PM
    You are so talented, I felt drawn into your tale. This is a fabulous poem. Another to my favorites.

  1. Date: 4/3/2013 10:23:00 AM
    Heather this is truly amazing poetry, your Haiku's stand out yet compliment the whole structure of this a wonderful poem!

  1. Date: 4/2/2013 10:58:00 PM
    wow, Heather, so romantic. This is really really good!! I say it again and again, you are one talented lady!! a fave back at ya.

  1. Date: 4/2/2013 9:26:00 PM
    Hello Heather! I have never attempted- nor have I even read- this form before, and I already know that you did it perfectly. I reeeeeally love this, it is absolutely gorgeous. You have a way with words and imagery! I love it. You are awesome :)

  1. Date: 4/2/2013 7:50:00 PM
    Amazing romantic poetry Heather...:-)

  1. Date: 4/2/2013 6:03:00 PM
    I've never tried to write a haibun. This lovely piece is inspirational, to say the least. Fine work! Jack

  1. Date: 4/2/2013 1:07:00 PM
    Heather a wonderful romantic piece of work, metaphor or not we don't have fireflies here in UK and I would love to see them...David

  1. Date: 4/2/2013 10:08:00 AM
    First time reading your work, this is outstanding! Very powerful & immense! Well done!

  1. Date: 4/2/2013 9:45:00 AM
    Oh, mercy that's good. I can see why you love this form. It makes for an amazing read when done well ... like this. Everything here flows so smoothly together, it's a little staggering. FAVE!