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  1. Date: 6/12/2013 9:04:00 PM
    Re-visiting this awesome piece - the infamous Haibun that kick started your narrative career! NINJA right back atcha! Also, thanks for your comment on my latest poem - I am now VERY curious to read the Facebook poem you mentioned. Do you still have it? If you don't want to post it on PS, you should soupmail it to me :)

  1. Date: 4/2/2013 9:21:00 PM
    I really love this! Quite a pleasure to read. Amazingly penned poem depicting a wonderful story. Well done! :)

  1. Date: 4/2/2013 6:10:00 PM
    Nope... Never stomped cotton. But I recall clearly my father's stories about picking by hand, the small cuts caused by the boles, and snapping the head off a rattlesnake hiding in the rows. I'd never have known this was your first haibun. Beautifully done... Jack

  1. Date: 4/2/2013 7:22:00 AM
    A beautiful story Caleb! the 3 line verse are not haiku but add spice. The haiku should add a visual that the prose doe not. [remember haiku is 2 parts not 3] My suggestion since the story is so good try not to use [I] so often. ex: [Biscoe in the fall, at harvest time, was unforgettable] /Dem Beautiful Bums is the verse about the 1959 world series when the Dodgers won ;)/ Hope that helps Light & Love

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    Date: 4/2/2013 7:24:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    nope I never stomped cotton but I did stomp HAY, and I did tend tobacco under nets in 100 heat in aug. and then sow the leaves in the barn. I have also carried a chicken in each hand [by the feet] up a flight of stairs in a massive chicken shed..dozens and dozens of flappin chickens
  1. Date: 4/2/2013 7:08:00 AM
    WOW! I hate to say "I told you so," but... I told you so :) You are a natural at this form! Your descriptions are truly superb, and your haiku add so much depth to the overall work. I love the subtle rhyme of the second one. Awesome job!

  1. Date: 4/2/2013 3:50:00 AM
    This is so impressive and amazing my dear friend Caleb! You're really a great poet. I haven't tried this form yet because I knew it's difficult but you did it very well on your first attempt. Thank you so much for sharing. I truly enjoyed it this afternoon! Thanks a lot for stopping by and your lovely comments on my poem. Have a nice day! love and hugs, Leonora

  1. Date: 4/2/2013 1:08:00 AM
    The monster hydraulics seems to get everywhere don t they.My childhood house used to be surrounded by building is all one see.We used to run wild in fields..I understand your nostalgia completely..Im there with you.I never stimped cotton..I wish i did seems like fun.Your haibun are a masterpiece..i mean the avatar pic..Is that you ? :)

  1. Date: 4/1/2013 4:29:00 PM should write a book..this is totally awesome...while I know everything about crappie and bream I have never stomped cotton but my mom grew up picking cotton in their cotton field..we..have pics of those big white cotton sacks over their are good!!!! Donna

  1. Date: 4/1/2013 3:31:00 PM
    oh my gosh are you sure it's your first attempt. It is marvelous, it truly is. I don't see any one doing better than this, so I can't give any critical advice, Caleb. I mean, there are other poets doing really good ones, and you are on that level!