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Flight - for Metamorph Contest

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Flight - for Metamorph Contest

	Flight (Original poem)

	It’s morning
	early on when
	I begin to sparkle, 
	dance, 
	ignite.
	I radiate,
	burn bright,
	reach high and grasp,
	talk fast and loud,
	create chaos,
	risk all to
	fly 
	(flying is the best part).


	Flight (Tanka)

	Morning, early on.
	I dance, radiate, burn bright, 
	chaos in my grasp. 
	I’ll chance my manic madness — 
	anything so I can fly.  	


	By Jack Jordan
	For Debbi Guzzi’s “Metamorph Free Poetry Contest”

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  1. Date: 5/1/2013 6:04:00 PM

    Jack, Congratulations :-) In Debbie's "Metamorph" contest. always~ PD

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan Date: 5/1/2013 7:07:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks! I'm enjoying the competitions. But you must too since your name is frequently on the winners lists. So, a general congrats to you as well... J
  1. Date: 4/28/2013 10:05:00 AM

    Congrats On Your Win, Jack~A.O

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan Date: 4/28/2013 10:54:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks. I'm just getting into the contest scene, and am enjoying myself... Jack
  1. Date: 4/25/2013 5:08:00 PM

    Pretty amazing for your first tanka. Congratulations.

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan Date: 4/25/2013 5:18:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    An earlier poem titled "Regret" was actually my first tanka attempt.
    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan Date: 4/25/2013 5:16:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you, Richard. I value your opinion... Jack
  1. Date: 4/25/2013 10:22:00 AM

    Many congratulations Jack , well done xx

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan Date: 4/25/2013 10:26:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you, Mandy. I appreciate the congrats, and the prompt to look at the contest winners... Jack
  1. Date: 3/29/2013 7:49:00 AM

    - This is really good, Jack! - (I agree with Andrea)- Luck in contest!!!! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan Date: 3/29/2013 7:53:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks, Anne-Lise. Have a great weekend! Jack
  1. Date: 3/28/2013 11:32:00 PM

    jack, I will tell you honestly, I think the metamorphosis made for the better poem of the two! I just loved the manic line in your tanka!!

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan Date: 3/29/2013 7:44:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I agree. There is something good to be said for time and compression (reconsider and get rid of what's unnecessary). "Manic" is just the way it is. Thanks for the comment. Jack
  1. Date: 3/28/2013 10:22:00 PM

    I wasnt "getting it"..after reading your poem I think I do..Love both versions..BG

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan Date: 3/29/2013 7:46:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks for the reading, Barbara. Jack