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All Aboard

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All Aboard

She is standing on the tracks,
waiting for a train to pass.
Her lips are a velvet line
of sweetness.
Her hair
is a beguiling mess.
The suitcase she carries
rides the curve of her silky hip,
and the blue sky dulls behind her.
Her eyes are a mystery,
and I'm left enchanted by the sting.
All I can think is,
"God, I wish I were a train ... just this once."

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  1. Date: 4/24/2013 10:19:00 AM

    Excellent! I love where your mind went with this and it felt genuine to a tee. One question though... is she standing ON the tracks or BESIDE the tracks?

  1. Date: 3/24/2013 4:41:00 AM

    Beautiful....

  1. Date: 3/20/2013 7:58:00 AM

    Congrats on your winning poem Caleb. Donna

  1. Date: 3/20/2013 4:53:00 AM

    Caleb like always outstanding. I love the image and of course the last line put a smile on my face. Nicely done. Congrats on your win. Warm Smiles, Connie

  1. Date: 3/19/2013 10:25:00 AM

    Lol, interesting concept Caleb or perhaps the conductor--congrats on your win

  1. Date: 3/19/2013 8:32:00 AM

    nice one! i love the description of the woman...

  1. Date: 3/18/2013 8:59:00 PM

    Caleb your such a flirt. Great twist

  1. Date: 3/18/2013 6:45:00 PM

    Hi Caleb Congratulations :-) with your nice and wonderful winning free verse poem~ Always & Forever* PD

  1. Date: 3/15/2013 4:35:00 PM

    how much Irish are you anyway, Caleb? I think I am lucky if I am 1/4 Irish, but I am 1/2 Welsh. Does that count, do you think?

  1. Date: 3/14/2013 11:39:00 AM

    I have nothing to say about this other than I absolutely LOVE the pictures your words paint =) and you should pop right to the home pg where all my posts come up...just scroll down till you see your name...and I featured this 1 in that post =) thoughts1nmotion.wordpress.com

    Jean Avatar Lauryn Jean Date: 3/14/2013 11:41:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    And you don't have to sign up..you should just be able to scroll and read
  1. Date: 3/13/2013 7:44:00 AM

    You have painted such a vivid scene in the reader's mind, Caleb. I love that most of the poem is spent describing what you see, and in the last line we are given a glimpse into your thoughts. Wonderful!

  1. Date: 3/13/2013 6:56:00 AM

    Thanks for stopping by to read my poems.

  1. Date: 3/13/2013 5:55:00 AM

    This gave me a smile, Caleb - Thank you! - Love it, well done. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

  1. Date: 3/12/2013 11:25:00 PM

    You have such a unique way of saying the ordinary in an extraordinary way.Love this one.

  1. Date: 3/12/2013 4:58:00 PM

    Wow....cool

  1. Date: 3/12/2013 9:03:00 AM

    This is a lovely scene you have painted. I am left breathless.