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The Hostage

I dream beyond these battlements 
Of islands in the west 
Beyond the strings and sacraments 
That occupy the rest

My gentle sister, soft and pure 
Admires her silken sleeves 
A subtle breeze begins to stir 
The eucalyptus leaves 

And like the leaves that tremble so 
My mind will dance toward 
A distant archipelago 
Or ships that I may board 

And though the only ship I meet 
Is drawn upon a page,
In books or verses I repeat  
These thoughts I can't assuage 

I dance in sprays of golden flowers 
That sprout along a stream
I walk along the shore for hours 
Til night begins to gleam 

For I'm too young to marry now 
But houses will decree 
I ask the wind to try, somehow, 
to take me to the sea



-For Isaiah Zerbst's 'Edmund Blair Leighton' contest and inspired by his painting with the same title 

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  1. Date: 5/13/2013 7:30:00 PM

    Very nice write. Well done.

  1. Date: 4/5/2013 9:18:00 PM

    Good for you , congratulation Jeremy, you have it, i feel it......Love Terry a 7>>

  1. Date: 4/5/2013 9:18:00 PM

    Good for you , congratulation Jeremy, you have it, i feel it......Love Terry a 7>>

  1. Date: 3/29/2013 6:07:00 AM

    Excellent write Jeremy! Big congrats on your win. Hugs

  1. Date: 3/28/2013 9:31:00 PM

    Congratulations, with your winning poem Jeremy , I'm also stopping by to say hi, and wish you an early Happy Easter, just in case I don't have time to stop by in the next few days. take care and have yourself a good one~ Always & Forever *LINDA"

  1. Date: 3/27/2013 11:24:00 PM

    Off to sea with no destination but peace, that I found within these stanzas. Nice work poet!

    Martin Avatar Jeremy Martin Date: 3/28/2013 12:48:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks!! Have a great day
  1. Date: 3/25/2013 2:45:00 PM

    this one was excellent and I am very glad you made the list. Congrats to you, Jeremy.

    Martin Avatar Jeremy Martin Date: 3/28/2013 12:48:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Andrea, thank you
  1. Date: 3/25/2013 1:12:00 PM

    Wonderful rhythmic flow in your poem !! Congrats on your win !! I really enjoyed this one !!

    Martin Avatar Jeremy Martin Date: 3/28/2013 12:48:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you, Debra!
  1. Date: 3/25/2013 11:07:00 AM

    Awesome job, Jeremy! Very well-deserving win. I especially love the fourth verse.

    Martin Avatar Jeremy Martin Date: 3/28/2013 12:47:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks a bunch, Heather ;) !!
  1. Date: 3/25/2013 3:35:00 AM

    Congratulations Jeremy!! Well done. Hugs Deb

    Martin Avatar Jeremy Martin Date: 3/28/2013 12:47:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks, Deborah!!
  1. Date: 3/24/2013 7:19:00 PM

    Congratulations on your winning placement in my contest! It is nice to know that others are inspired by Edmund's awesome paintings. I can tell that you put a lot of time into making this a great poem, and I admire that.

    Martin Avatar Jeremy Martin Date: 3/28/2013 12:47:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I enjoyed writing it a lot, a belated thank you!!
  1. Date: 3/15/2013 11:27:00 PM

    So good, I find it hard to believe this writing is original.

    Martin Avatar Jeremy Martin Date: 3/16/2013 6:28:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Wow, that's a really nice compliment. I assure you it is, though.
  1. Date: 3/15/2013 2:36:00 PM

    Jeremy, lovely quatrain, I imagine myself reading off on a voyage in this poem.

    Martin Avatar Jeremy Martin Date: 3/16/2013 6:28:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you!! Me, too. We can be co captains on the S.S. Soup
  1. Date: 3/10/2013 7:03:00 PM

    This is like a Robert Frost poem...very grand......Donna

    Martin Avatar Jeremy Martin Date: 3/12/2013 11:30:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Wow! What a comparison! :D
  1. Date: 3/6/2013 9:11:00 AM

    you really know how to nail the rhyme and rhythm in your poems and they flow so beautifully! i really love this one...

    Martin Avatar Jeremy Martin Date: 3/12/2013 11:29:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Ilene, thank you. Same for your lovely poems!
  1. Date: 3/6/2013 8:26:00 AM

    Hey Jeremy, this is a great take on Isaiah's contest and great job with the meter too!

    Martin Avatar Jeremy Martin Date: 3/12/2013 11:29:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you Craig!
  1. Date: 3/6/2013 12:57:00 AM

    Nice work, best of luck in the contest...

    Martin Avatar Jeremy Martin Date: 3/12/2013 11:29:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks, Raul
  1. Date: 3/6/2013 12:15:00 AM

    This is the kind of poetry I like..Lovely

    Martin Avatar Jeremy Martin Date: 3/12/2013 11:28:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks, Charmaine ;)
  1. Date: 3/5/2013 9:30:00 PM

    wow, you are amazing with this one. I will have to look at that hostage picture again. How interesting that you and I both posted today our poems for this challenge!!

    Martin Avatar Jeremy Martin Date: 3/5/2013 9:46:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    And thank you!
    Martin Avatar Jeremy Martin Date: 3/5/2013 9:44:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    It was a challenge, for sure. I wrestled with this one..was kinda like a baby alligator.