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Space

Space that one I need to fill
Now empty but like a bitter pill
It’s hard to swallow it’s hard to accept
The space left when from my heart you crept

You crept away slowly through the years
You left me with the unshed tears
A cavernous space your legacy
That’s what you left when you left me.

But hold the press the story’s not told
Another is now in my arms to hold
The space is filled once more it seems
The space you left when you stole my dreams.

There is no space just room for two
I know you didn’t mean to be untrue
But life is harsh and it sometimes seems
That space is there to make new dreams.

© 25/02/2013
Contest Entry
Work of fiction

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  1. Date: 3/7/2013 12:27:00 AM

    Beautiful and excellent piece,Mandy.lovely write.Congratulations on your superb win.Kudos to you great friend.

  1. Date: 3/6/2013 11:25:00 AM

    A great write. Congrats on your win.

  1. Date: 3/5/2013 4:32:00 PM

    congrats on your win Mandy

  1. Date: 3/5/2013 12:15:00 PM

    Great poem! Thought provoking... and I agree with Caleb - those last two lines really were a "wow" moment for me! FABULOUS :)

  1. Date: 3/5/2013 8:48:00 AM

    This is excellent. You really know how to end a poem. Nice Win!

  1. Date: 3/5/2013 4:53:00 AM

    love your space, congrats

  1. Date: 3/5/2013 4:02:00 AM

    Thanks for sharing, great poem.

  1. Date: 3/4/2013 7:24:00 PM

    I hope your new dreams are wonderful...congratulations...

    Tams The Golden Girl Avatar Mandy Tams The Golden Girl Date: 3/5/2013 2:16:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    They are Donna and thanks xx
  1. Date: 3/4/2013 10:14:00 AM

    congrads on your win Mandys.

    Tams The Golden Girl Avatar Mandy Tams The Golden Girl Date: 3/5/2013 2:16:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Bles you Yasmin love, stay cool xx
  1. Date: 3/4/2013 9:41:00 AM

    Mandy,, congratulations with your wonderful space-going poem in Susan's contest...xox~PD

    Tams The Golden Girl Avatar Mandy Tams The Golden Girl Date: 3/5/2013 2:17:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Pd xx
  1. Date: 3/4/2013 8:49:00 AM

    this is amazing poetry, Mandy, congrats number one for me

    Tams The Golden Girl Avatar Mandy Tams The Golden Girl Date: 3/5/2013 2:17:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks harry, you are such a support for me xx
  1. Date: 2/27/2013 5:05:00 PM

    Mandy, I really like how you did Susan's topic on space. VERY nice. And so, you think I am very solitary? I think maybe you are right!!

    Tams The Golden Girl Avatar Mandy Tams The Golden Girl Date: 3/5/2013 2:18:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I think you are a brick Andy and I think I told you once before lol (brick = something good) xx
  1. Date: 2/27/2013 12:29:00 PM

    I see so much character in these verses. There is always space for love and forgivness. Love where you took this from beginning heartache to a space for new dreams....

    Tams The Golden Girl Avatar Mandy Tams The Golden Girl Date: 3/5/2013 2:19:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks for that Debra xx
  1. Date: 2/27/2013 12:52:00 AM

    sadness to happiness, such positivity.. lovely Mandy...

    Tams The Golden Girl Avatar Mandy Tams The Golden Girl Date: 3/5/2013 2:19:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks harry, i always try to be poitive xx
  1. Date: 2/26/2013 7:21:00 PM

    What a deep and heart felt write, Mandy. I loved it, very well done my dear poet friend :) hugs

    Tams The Golden Girl Avatar Mandy Tams The Golden Girl Date: 3/5/2013 2:20:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Anne xx
  1. Date: 2/26/2013 1:44:00 PM

    Hi Mandy glad it all went well for you, I like family gatherings....David

    Tams The Golden Girl Avatar Mandy Tams The Golden Girl Date: 3/5/2013 2:20:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks David xx
  1. Date: 2/26/2013 4:36:00 AM

    I really like the use of space in your poem. "Another is now in my arms." Space is filled not only within the heart but in the arms. Nicely done Mandy. Best wishes in the contest. Warm Smiles, Connie

    Tams The Golden Girl Avatar Mandy Tams The Golden Girl Date: 3/5/2013 2:21:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Connie, you always send warm smiles luv and I appreciate them xx
  1. Date: 2/25/2013 8:29:00 PM

    great write Mandy...winning wishes

    Tams The Golden Girl Avatar Mandy Tams The Golden Girl Date: 3/5/2013 2:20:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Joseph xx
  1. Date: 2/25/2013 3:00:00 PM

    Wonderful story even if it is fiction..good luck

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    Thanks Donna xx
  1. Date: 2/25/2013 2:56:00 PM

    love it, mandy! best of luck in the contest - this sounds like a winner to me.

    Tams The Golden Girl Avatar Mandy Tams The Golden Girl Date: 3/5/2013 2:22:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Ilene xx
  1. Date: 2/25/2013 12:55:00 PM

    Very nice, Mandy! Sad but deep... Terry

    Tams The Golden Girl Avatar Mandy Tams The Golden Girl Date: 3/5/2013 2:15:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Terry xx
  1. Date: 2/25/2013 11:37:00 AM

    aw thank God it s fiction..a great entry Mandys babey..

    Tams The Golden Girl Avatar Mandy Tams The Golden Girl Date: 2/25/2013 11:44:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    bless you my friend and it is fiction xx
  1. Date: 2/25/2013 11:34:00 AM

    Mandy well done I like it....any black eyes? lol.....David

    Tams The Golden Girl Avatar Mandy Tams The Golden Girl Date: 2/25/2013 11:44:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hi and thanks David, not a black eye in sight a wonderful evening all rounds thanks, truly amazing xx
  1. Date: 2/25/2013 11:29:00 AM

    MANDY!!!!! Every line is so so replete with meaning and wonder! I LOVED THIS! Going into my favorites! :) Just a little observation...second stanza...third line, shouldn't that read YOUR legacy? ;)

    Tams The Golden Girl Avatar Mandy Tams The Golden Girl Date: 2/25/2013 11:33:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Eileen I have put it right and thanks for the eagle eye xx
  1. Date: 2/25/2013 11:02:00 AM

    great words Hun....Seren

    Tams The Golden Girl Avatar Mandy Tams The Golden Girl Date: 2/25/2013 11:33:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    hi sass I'm just about back in action xx