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The Fall

Stumbling 
in low darkness
I fall 
against 
that damp brick wall,
my every surface 
rubs grime and slippery. 
I roll bug-like into myself,
a vain attempt 
to protect 
what hope 
or dignity 
I have 
left. 

This poem is about the depression phase of the bipolar cycle. It is accompanied by another poem titled "Flight," describing the manic phase.

For the "Under the Influence" contest
 Jack Jordan

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  1. Date: 3/14/2013 5:29:00 PM

    Congratulations Jack...hope you are happy today...Donna

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan Date: 3/14/2013 8:47:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks... It's been a good day. Fortunately, it's rarely as dark as the poem. Jack
  1. Date: 3/13/2013 6:49:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win:) I can identify with this poem very much...

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan Date: 3/13/2013 9:53:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Not too much, I hope. It's not a good place to be. Thanks for the congrats. Jack
  1. Date: 3/13/2013 5:43:00 PM

    Hello Jack. your poem is amazing! I love it;-)! Congratulations on your wonderful win in Nathan's contest~ always*LINDA

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan Date: 3/13/2013 6:04:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    To be honest I'd lost track of entering the contest. I'm mighty happy that you pointed it out! And thanks for your great comment. Jack
  1. Date: 2/26/2013 10:08:00 AM

    I love this dark place you've created in your poem...some of us know it all too well...great job!

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan Date: 2/26/2013 10:24:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Yes it is dark there sometimes, although not as often as in the past. Thanks for the reply. J
  1. Date: 2/26/2013 8:53:00 AM

    Hi Jack, there is nothing wrong with falling. I fall all the time. We just get up and keep going. Have a great day. Lucilla

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan Date: 2/26/2013 9:26:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    That is the answer. Thanks for reading. J
  1. Date: 2/25/2013 11:46:00 AM

    Ah Jack it's always a cert, that when we fall someone is watching...David

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan Date: 2/25/2013 12:01:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Always, I'm afraid. J
  1. Date: 2/25/2013 10:50:00 AM

    Very sad...smile and climb

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan Date: 2/25/2013 11:28:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    It's the only thing to do. Thanks for reading. J