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Blue

This girl that I once thought was beautiful
And when I first saw her, it was like phew!
She seemed at first like she was likeable
But became a person I no longer knew

As like the weather she was changeable
With her felt like a game of guess who?
And talk about one having a right gutful
Had I bitten off more than I could chew

And me thinking that we were inseparable
That wed always be together that’s us two
As she seemed like someone meaningful
No one before had said to me I love you!

And now I feel that I'm completely unfixable
No matter how much tape is used or glue
Here I am yet again getting all emotional
But guess the story of my life feeling blue



WRITTEN OCT/NOV 2012 THIS IVE TAKEN BITS FROM WORLDS APART
LOVE IS RARE USED IN DIFFERENT WAY TO EXPLAIN IN NOTHER WAY ABOUT AN EX
ALSO YOU MAY HAVE NOTICED IVE USE THE WORD BLUE A LOT
LIKE A STATE OF MIND WORLDS APART THE SINGLETON ETC
I DID WRITE A POEM CALLED WITH OUT YOU AND WITH YOU
WITH THIS I WAS USEING ALL THE WORDS ID NEVER USED IN OTHER WRITES
TO FIT AROUND THIS WORD  ALSO USEING OTHER WORDS KEEPING TO TWO SYMBALS
A BIT LIKE DEVIOUS WAS HER NAME  endure fate love is rare ect
                                                               NOTE
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INSPIERD BY OTHER POETS ON SOUP  JESSICA  REBECCA LUCAUS  CAROL ANNE 
LARUA  ALL THESE NEW POETS AND OF COURSE PD THE DESTOYER(LINDA)
AND OTHERS THANKYOU FOR INSPERATION I HAVE SPOUTS HERE AND THERE X
JUST SO MANY OTHER THINGS OCUPIING MY MIND RIGHT NOW OR THOUGH
 WORKING ON ANOTHER WRITE CALLED BROKEN TRYING TO USE MORE MEtAPHORES

again finaly put in to better context  redietdde abit   AND CHANGE OF TITLE AS I THOUGHT SUITED BETTER













                                     

I could have been that ornament on her 

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  1. Date: 2/21/2013 1:03:00 PM

    It's so nice .... to be inspired by others' poems David. - This is gorgeous! - Have a pleasant day. - oxox / / Anne-Lise