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Battling Addiction

               You  told
               me  once  
               about the
               R e l i e f:
               the  f o g,
               that haze
               of apathy
               that  veils
               the  mind,
               b l urri n g
               the  edges
              of your pain. 
             Can  you  feel
          anything  at all? I  
        watch you drink your 
      life  away, far too many 
     moments  lost,  forgotten
    in that  h a z e. I watch as
   you   f e e d   your  disease, 
   suck yourself dry before you
   suck  me  dry,  draining  me 
   like  one of  your bottles, till
   I'm empty inside. But I can't
   wait around for you to  snap,
   to throw me against the wall.
   I won't  shatter  like a bottle. 
   I won't  burst  in a mosaic of 
   glass  and  light.  You cannot 
   b r e a k   someone   who  is
   already b r o k e n. You can't 
   fix someone with  s l u r r ed 
   apologies  or  promises  that 
   smell  like  stale   alcohol.  I
   can't  be  there  to  drown at 
   the  bottom  of  your   bottle. 
   I’m done  with  rock  bottom.


  For Anne's "Battling Addiction" contest
  Placed: 1st

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  1. Date: 4/11/2013 1:10:00 AM

    Excellent poem. Love the shape. You deserve your 1st. place.

  1. Date: 3/19/2013 8:57:00 AM

    I find this poem sad, but not overly depressing; a fine line that takes skill to achieve. It is one of the best-looking shapes I have ever seen.

  1. Date: 3/13/2013 10:13:00 PM

    I commented on this earlier, then found myself telling numerous non-soupers about it. It's really a marvelous piece, and deserves the win. Jack

  1. Date: 3/12/2013 6:28:00 PM

    Beautiful physical shape and highly effective and powerful powerful words. This poems shines like a blade, you deserved this win tenfold.

  1. Date: 3/10/2013 9:04:00 PM

    HEATHER, :-) CONGRATULATIONS in Anne's "Battling Addiction" contest.. I think very highly of Miss Anne, take care~ LINDA

  1. Date: 3/9/2013 7:54:00 PM

    Great great great.

  1. Date: 3/9/2013 3:43:00 PM

    Fantastic!! Congrats are your win!! :)

  1. Date: 3/9/2013 9:51:00 AM

    Darling Heather, it came to no surprise that this absolutely perfect entry for my contest was yours :) belated congrats and thank you so, so much for participating. You have talent that I will forever admire. Hugs!

    Ober Avatar Heather Ober Date: 3/9/2013 11:51:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    You are so sweet, Anne! Thank you so much for my placement. This was a great contest.
  1. Date: 3/9/2013 6:47:00 AM

    Cool

  1. Date: 3/9/2013 5:49:00 AM

    Congratulations heather a superb write and shape well done xx

  1. Date: 3/9/2013 1:06:00 AM

    oh yes, I remember this superlative poem!!! Congrats on your well deserved win.

  1. Date: 3/8/2013 8:12:00 PM

    I think I should open a psychic hot line, after all I did predict a first place finish, ha ha ha. Mind you with your skill it was an easy prediction to make.

  1. Date: 3/8/2013 8:09:00 PM

    Without a doubt my hands down favorite. I am so in awe of your talent.

  1. Date: 3/8/2013 3:24:00 PM

    'You cannot break someone who is already broken'...favorite line of many... EXTREMELY effective and compelling using the 'rock bottom' line as the last and bottom line...Whew! - Tim

  1. Date: 3/8/2013 10:54:00 AM

    Excellent poem and form my dear friend Heather! I like it! Big big congratulations on your well-deserved super win! love/hugs, Leonora

  1. Date: 3/8/2013 8:39:00 AM

    Heather--fantastic poem and the shape is perfect to top it off--and as you probably have found, hard to perfect because edit looks different from the view--you do this so well!!

  1. Date: 3/8/2013 6:31:00 AM

    Yep...I knew it was gonna be up there...top spot! Go Heather!

  1. Date: 3/7/2013 10:32:00 PM

    Congrats Anne... You deserve the win... :)

  1. Date: 3/7/2013 8:47:00 PM

    I knew this would be a winner! Congratulations!

  1. Date: 3/7/2013 8:07:00 PM

    Tonight the bottle took you to the top! Great shap and content. RAY

  1. Date: 3/7/2013 7:13:00 PM

    Congratulations heather. Great win!

  1. Date: 3/7/2013 6:48:00 PM

    Hiccup! Great shape poem, Heather! Congratulations on your win! Ruben.

  1. Date: 3/7/2013 6:41:00 PM

    congrats on a great win Heather

  1. Date: 3/5/2013 9:24:00 PM

    I've returned to this poem several times, never failing to be taken into the clarity, honesty and bravery of your words. They seem barely contained by the form. On first reading I didn't understand the need for the concrete poetic form. However, upon reading it again, I came to realize how important the form is to the power of the writing. Thank you for sharing and trusting. Jack

  1. Date: 3/4/2013 9:13:00 PM

    Very powerful writing! Thanks for putting it into words. J

  1. Date: 2/26/2013 1:40:00 PM

    Ok...this is awesome. Not everyone can pull off a shape or concrete poem. You nailed it. I'll be surprised to not see it near the top of the winner's list....just great

  1. Date: 2/26/2013 12:53:00 PM

    Heather;This is a great poem. I like your style. It reminds me of a poem I have here. You might want to check it out. ( Devil Inside A Bottle ) There are all kinds of Addctions. This is one of them. Thanks for sharing. Lucilla

  1. Date: 2/24/2013 7:54:00 PM

    wow, really liked that one, creative delivery for the message

  1. Date: 2/22/2013 8:08:00 AM

    This would have beenperfect for one of the contest.the message in a bottle contest.

  1. Date: 2/21/2013 6:52:00 PM

    You're a genius Heather.... A well thought out poem you've got here..... Kudos.

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