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Without a Song

I tried to write a song 
So I could treasure it forever
The words came from my heart 
And I thought that I would never 

Feel as happy as I did the day 
That I sat down to write
It was a time when things were hopeful
And the future was so bright

The words I wrote meant something
That was special and so true 
And I put it to some music 
That was special to me too

It was music that I needed 
To make my song complete
Music that I thought had come
From feelings that were deep

But I had written prematurely 
And I started getting clues
That instead of singing songs of hope
I should have sung the blues

The words I thought reflected truth
Were somehow not in tune
With the music that I thought was love
I had sung them much too soon 

Someday I’ll have a melody
To which I can sing along
But I guess for now my life will be
Without the music or a song


Nov 3, 2012

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  1. Date: 5/7/2013 6:11:00 PM

    I looked at this because I have just written a songy sorta poem, I'll be posting soon. This is really good Becca, you have some truly great lines in here and the whole thing works so well, great ending. Wish you did more in this form. Take care, Richard

    Seal Avatar Richard D Seal Date: 5/7/2013 6:21:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    that should have been goddess writer by the way lol
    Seal Avatar Richard D Seal Date: 5/7/2013 6:19:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks for your added comment in Redemption, I'll never be same ol', life is not same ol', is so many things to write about, I know I'm a shocker sometimes lol, don't become same ol' Becca, you're a god writer, explore, don't worry what others think, I don't lol
  1. Date: 3/14/2013 10:57:00 PM

    How did I miss this one Becca? This was a special surprise and treat. Good night, hugs Rick.

  1. Date: 2/23/2013 9:33:00 AM

    OOOH! LOVE THIS...You are so BRILLIANT! This is Delicious...Everything is perfect...Should be set to music. As a friend...I'll say: I couldn't be prouder of you...than I am today!!!!! My Favs

  1. Date: 1/29/2013 2:19:00 PM

    WOW. Speechless over here!!! (Adding to faves)

  1. Date: 1/29/2013 1:04:00 PM

    Girl; This is just beautiful. I loved it and one day you will be able to write that song. Thanks for sharing. Lucilla

  1. Date: 1/27/2013 3:14:00 PM

    Interesting concept if music were to show a person's personality what would our music sound like aye? I wonder? //verse two second line from the bottom [that that]//Light & Love

  1. Date: 1/27/2013 2:46:00 AM

    amazing poetry, so sad and profound, many will relate to this....

  1. Date: 1/26/2013 2:39:00 PM

    beautiful and so sad, my friend

  1. Date: 1/26/2013 1:34:00 PM

    this is nicely rhymed and very interesting, Becca. I especially like your concluding thoughts: how for now, life will be without the music. Loved it.

  1. Date: 1/26/2013 12:32:00 PM

    Dear Becca, What we live in our heart is the real thing! Even if outside reality doesn’t correspond, we have lived this marvelous melody of love’s song! Even if it were for an instance! Lovely feelings, truthful expressions! I am back! Thank you for your comment!

  1. Date: 1/26/2013 12:25:00 PM

    Becca I really love this, it is full of emotion and it does sing off the page, very well done...David

  1. Date: 1/26/2013 11:16:00 AM

    I have struggled with this topic, especially in music, trying to capture a moment before it has passed. You have to be really quick sometimes, I am afraid that often I am not and while others may be good at remembering and being able to get back that place and writing from that feeling, I struggle to write anything other than how I am honestly feeling in that moment. I really connect with this. Thank you Becca. I look forward to reading more of your work.