Submit a Poem
Get Your Premium Membership
spacer


Comments Inbox

 
About This Poem

He Was Her Valentine

He Was Her Valentine

On this seasonal wonder
of a day, one arrow tipped
in celestial honey pricked
her pristine heart.

Mellifluous, shadows,
shoulders, hands
of gentle touch opened her
to aromatic atoms of love.

Into the night and forever,
her heart echoes thulian pink
in the aftermath 
of a garnet beginning.

©Kathryn McLoughlin Collins
©January 23, 2013

for a contest using ten words within a poem:  echo, pristine, shelter, garnet, shadow, celestial, mellifluous, seasonal, thulian, aroma

Please Login to post a comment
 
  1. Date: 3/9/2013 7:17:00 PM

    Amazing you weave all those words into a beautiful expression of love. So very lovely!

  1. Date: 2/22/2013 5:26:00 PM

    Colourful and sweet! Brilliant... within the constrictions of the contest. Nifty assonance and alliterations too. BRAVO Kathy!! Love you, Keith

  1. Date: 2/22/2013 7:38:00 AM

    Love the "arrow tipped with celestial honey." A colorful work that no mere paper card could convey. Love, daver

  1. Date: 2/16/2013 4:23:00 PM

    this is so intriguing Kathryn, wonderfully structioned, with in the shackles of those chosen words....

  1. Date: 2/8/2013 6:01:00 PM

    I regret not trying those ten words yet because just look what a beautiful poem they produced!!

  1. Date: 2/2/2013 4:21:00 PM

    I love how you used these words Kathryn. A pink afterglow in her heart from the passion of deep red. Awesome!

  1. Date: 1/30/2013 9:07:00 AM

    Very touching excellent poem written by a very good poet. I saw that you view another poet named Margherita Russo she's only 14 and I know it would mean alot for her to have you read her newest poem if you have the time. Thank you very much.

  1. Date: 1/28/2013 4:30:00 PM

    Oh my, Kathyrn...the reference to earth's minerals, shining gems, etc. in the last verse just floors me!...Had to read this beauty several times!...Oops, just saw this is for a contest?...A true 'gem' nonetheless (you're kinda getting the hang of this poetry thing, aren't you?) Much love to you my friend - Tim

  1. Date: 1/23/2013 12:19:00 PM

    An interesting way to 'inspire' a poem... more rigid than other 'structures', I suppose...I don't think I'd be up to it... Nevertheless, you have made a very fine work, Kathy... nice imagery, I enjoyed it! Love Terry (plus, I learned a new word "thulian" - I had heard of "thulium" before, but I don't think thulium has a thulian hue...)

  1. Date: 1/23/2013 10:16:00 AM

    Very descriptive poetry Kathryn, enjoyed xxx