a laser light by Debbie Guzzi

Deborah Burch

Date: 3/1/2013 9:50:00 PM

Congratulations Miss Pitty Pat!! ;) you are so gifted!! Big ole Congrats on all your wins!! Love you bunches an miss you, Scarlet.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/26/2013 4:39:00 PM

oooh, GREAT last line, Debs!! Congrats on your win. Aren't these fun to see?

kash poet

Date: 2/26/2013 10:59:00 AM

Very nice Debbie!Congrats on the win.

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 2/26/2013 10:31:00 AM

Many congratulations on your number 1 oh cool lady xx

Connie Gildersleeve

Date: 2/26/2013 4:03:00 AM

A powerful right Debbie. Congratulation on your win. Connie

Joyce Johnson

Date: 2/25/2013 11:53:00 PM

No more shooting Debbie. Love, Joyce

Tahera Mannan

Date: 2/25/2013 11:07:00 PM

Many congrats Debbie for this well deserved win

Ray Dillard

Date: 2/25/2013 9:39:00 PM

Debbie, Congratulations on your win in the contest! RAY

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 2/25/2013 9:05:00 PM

Debbie, Congratulations with your winning poem in Rix's "A "Gun"-o-ku " contest. Goodnight~ LINDA

Gwendolen R.

Date: 2/25/2013 9:00:00 PM

This was a G R E A T haiku, Debbie! I felt like I was captured by a moment in a James Bond movie! Such a suspenseful juxtoposition!!! Wonderful work AS ALWAYS---luv, gwendolen

marvin celestial

Date: 1/30/2013 6:50:00 PM

This is great poem to ponder while on the street.

Isaiah Zerbst

Date: 1/28/2013 12:08:00 PM

I rather like the gun-o-kus, mostly because they can be read either way. Depending on whether the person is in favour of guns or no, and whether the gunner is a hero or villain. As in this case, where all possibilities are present. Nice job with the laser, a stroke of imagination.

John Posey

Date: 1/24/2013 6:32:00 PM

Great Haiku... Tells an epic story and displays great talent.... Love ya much.... Jake

Vicky Tsiluma

Date: 1/23/2013 10:46:00 PM

Very nice Debbie! Who knew Haiku can be so mysteriously dramatic - you've opened up the possibilities. Wow! Well done!

harry horsman

Date: 1/23/2013 3:46:00 PM

like this Debbie,, just watch for the cross fire...

Frank Polgar

Date: 1/23/2013 10:44:00 AM

Reminds me of the film Collateral starring Tom Cruise and Jamie Foxx. Great haiku.

Connie Gildersleeve

Date: 1/22/2013 12:34:00 PM

Debbie you sound like an expert with laser lights and having a taxi waiting too. LOL. A great visual poem, I'm running a Vedic in my mine of Debbie escaping from the scene. LOL. Haiku Poems always surprises how with so little words, you can paint an entire picture. I need to write more of these. I think I've only written one. Warm Smiles Always, Connie

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 1/22/2013 10:39:00 AM

oh this is good are you on terrorist duty? xx (question is 10 the optimum syllables ?)

yasmin khan

Date: 1/22/2013 10:06:00 AM

love and huggs to my queen of haiku and the queen of everything. with her midas quill, sending love to the soup's light who enlightens everyone with her spiritual and intellectual light..your Yassie!!!

Jack Ellison

Date: 1/22/2013 6:42:00 AM

With the heightened discussions about gun control, this hits home! Hugs, Jack

Yesha Shah

Date: 1/22/2013 4:52:00 AM

Yes, even I was thinking of a Bond movie sequence reading this. a very well done haiku, Debbie.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/22/2013 12:09:00 AM

VERY nice. It's so difficult to do a haiku on guns and I think you pulled it off.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/22/2013 12:09:00 AM

as ruben said, it makes us think of a spy movie. I thought of a terrorist.

Ruben O.

Date: 1/21/2013 5:24:00 PM

I visualized James Bond in one of his secret missions! : ) I like it! [Did you listen to Adele's "Skyfall"? ...I love that song.] I dont know if the monoku uses a cut marker! : ) I'm still learning about Haiku! Brian definition: "Monoku is a senryu/haiku with a slight enigmatic/ambiguous flavour"

Ruben O. Date: 1/21/2013 5:27:00 PM

...And copy and paste this em dash ----> — is a gift for you! : )

Ruben O. Date: 1/21/2013 5:26:00 PM

I just know about the 2 sections of the monoku: "a boy takes the loaded gun" AND " loaded gun to play dead"...I was waiting for your opinion! : )

Catie Lindsey

Date: 1/21/2013 4:29:00 PM

Wow! Vivid imagery in this contemporary haiku, Deb. Very well done. hugs, Catie :)

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