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Sacred Ground


The icicles hung and dripped as we walked past…drip, drip, drip
A cat sat under the hedge shivering as if frightened to come out,
Scared by the whiteness. We breathed in the cold air as it stabbed at 
Our lungs then shot out like a samurai sword. Berries shone like 
The planets, lit by a full moon, birds caught in orbit, snatching,
...Feeding, emptying the night sky. The wood is quiet and empty,
Trees stand like nameless monuments towering over us, their bark 
Damp from the dew, the older one’s had split open like a double
Breasted coat.

the cold wind blows...
echoing through the trees
a woodpeckers call

A foliage of tongues murmurs as we walk towards a grey/green
Alter that came to rest a millennia ago now half buried and bound 
By vines that dig deep and etch their mark in the shards of sunlight.
We hear the scurry, see the leaves move, a rustle is the only reminder
That we are the guests, the intruders, the not-wanted, the watched...
Prayers are being said, Mother earth is listening…


© 21/1/2013

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  1. Date: 2/12/2013 2:08:00 PM

    very good mate ...a winner with me too... perhaps you should be a writer of novels ....great description here!

  1. Date: 2/12/2013 6:53:00 AM

    Very expressive and descriptive winning work..Enjoyed reading ...I could feel the cold ice coming into my lungs..Congrats...Sara

  1. Date: 2/7/2013 10:46:00 AM

    Hi David, back here again many , Congratulations on your winning "mixed up poem." Have yourself a nice day~ :-) xox~PD

  1. Date: 2/6/2013 4:11:00 PM

    Dear David, your poem has a beautiful entrance... and the ending has a perfect feeling... always~ TEX

  1. Date: 2/6/2013 10:33:00 AM

    Wow, your descriptions are oustanding!! Fantastic job, David! Congrats on your win :)

  1. Date: 2/6/2013 10:01:00 AM

    This is stunning! Fav. Congrats on your win, David. Just one of many favourite lines: "...the older ones had split open like a double breasted coat." - so very descriptive. Love, Su

  1. Date: 2/6/2013 8:27:00 AM

    Goosebumps here !! Spendid write !! I like the way your story line built to a climax...and love, love the climax. For yes...she is always listening. Congrats on your well deserved win.

  1. Date: 2/6/2013 3:47:00 AM

    Love it David and many congrats on your win xx

  1. Date: 2/6/2013 12:48:00 AM

    Beautiful piece,David.Great job.Congrats on your superb win in this contest.

  1. Date: 2/6/2013 12:33:00 AM

    context beautifully perceived...congrats on your win..

  1. Date: 2/5/2013 8:30:00 PM

    Lovely words David, very well done ....Seren

  1. Date: 2/5/2013 7:57:00 PM

    congrats on your win David

  1. Date: 2/5/2013 6:36:00 PM

    I'm a sucker for anything abouyt Mother Earth [shhhhhh] my only suggestion which still can be easily done is bring the prose into present tense with the haiku. Congrad's to you [and I so needed my tea ;) reading all these!] Light & Love

  1. Date: 2/5/2013 4:58:00 PM

    This is a beauty! And Mother earth does listen to beautiful things! :) Congratulations, David!

  1. Date: 2/5/2013 4:27:00 PM

    Fantastic, congratulations!

  1. Date: 1/27/2013 7:08:00 PM

    Hola, David your poem makes me want to walk with my eyes close, in order to feel all the beautiful-ness your poem exposes. ((with a jacket of course LOL ))The calling and sound of the pecker took me back to them days when I enjoyed watching nature and the light. A wonderful image and await... Hope Mother is listening and changes all... enjoyed..PD

  1. Date: 1/26/2013 8:44:00 PM

    Amazing! Beautiful imagery in this, David...One for the Winners' List, I'd say. Thank you for reading my poem and your kind comment. Always, Annalise

  1. Date: 1/25/2013 9:59:00 PM

    David; I don't know if this is for a contest, or not, but it's really good. A lot of imagination. thanks for sharing. Lucilla

  1. Date: 1/24/2013 1:24:00 PM

    I couldn't agree with Henry more- this is quite visually absorbing!! You have a way with depicting beautiful images in my mind. I love this David :)

  1. Date: 1/24/2013 10:15:00 AM

    amazing poetry here David,, visually absorbing...............

  1. Date: 1/22/2013 11:27:00 AM

    This is really beautiful David! Very descriptive, and it looks like the form for the contest is perfect..! <3

  1. Date: 1/22/2013 12:08:00 AM

    I tell you my friend, nature may well have done best without us. We done gone and killed off most of it's resources. We have become pairanhas to nature. "The not-wanted", so to speak. I like, a lot! Thanks for visiting and loving my write. One love my friend. Joy Wells

  1. Date: 1/21/2013 2:39:00 PM

    David Soup mail Light & Love

  1. Date: 1/21/2013 1:09:00 PM

    Gave me a snowy chill here my friend... Im back up and writing after a small vacation from Soup... catching up the best I can... Hope your well and your better half are doing well... Michael

  1. Date: 1/21/2013 9:40:00 AM

    Loved it David, snow about to start here again in an hour, fed up with it now ...Seren

  1. Date: 1/21/2013 8:03:00 AM

    Beautifully described my friend! Understand you're getting more than your usual share of the white stuff this year! Welcome to the club! LOL

  1. Date: 1/21/2013 6:52:00 AM

    a cold wind blew ..echoed through the trees..the sound of silence.Just beautiful Dave..I love your style.

  1. Date: 1/21/2013 3:09:00 AM

    Wow, this is a perfect, and I mean perfect entry into Debbie's contest! This is tremendous my friend! I truly loved reading this amazing and enormous poem this morning! What a powerful piece, such an intriguing poem, Great Work!!

  1. Date: 1/21/2013 3:08:00 AM

    and I doubt I need to say I love your work, it is evidently unique, I like how you managed to set the tone.

  1. Date: 1/21/2013 3:05:00 AM

    thank you david for your advice on my poem, no battle no glory. I would like for you to continue too advise on wich is the best category to choose for my poems as of yet i am a rookie and only have the gift of writing however you seem to be well equipped to help, and I am kindly obliged to ask assistance. thanx again, Naldeem

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