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Winter Dance

I thought like the winter you were cold. You always seemed out of my reach, so good looking and you had a certain strut. You were used to boys falling all over you. I said hi and you gave me a dissmissive glance. I continued to look in your direction and cleared my throat.  You looked up again curious to see what I wanted. I became lost in my emotions.

she tilts her head
and flips hair to the side --
our eyes lock

I stood there staring into your big brown eyes, tongue trapped in the back of my throat. I must have looked comical, you started to laugh. Not a cruel laugh it was one of sheer delight, your smile radiated warmth over your entire face. I had never before witnessed such beauty. once my tongue was free I asked you out to the winter dance. You surprised me by saying yes. I guess fortune does favor the bold. I walked away before you could change your mind. Each footstep in the snow marked the beat of my heart.

Debbie Guzzi's Mix it up contest.

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  1. Date: 2/10/2013 2:39:00 PM

    Congrats on your great win with this descriptive work..Sara

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 2/10/2013 7:29:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Sara
  1. Date: 2/7/2013 10:49:00 AM

    Richard, Congratulations on your winning "mixed up poem." Have yourself a nice day~ :-) xox~PD

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 2/7/2013 2:42:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks!
  1. Date: 2/6/2013 11:14:00 AM

    I'm a sucker for a happy ending and this one has it in spades !!! I liked your haiku and loved the finish. Very enjoyable read. Congrats on your win!!

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 2/7/2013 2:41:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Deborah
  1. Date: 2/6/2013 10:11:00 AM

    Congrats on your win with this romantic tale, Richard. I am wondering how did the dance work out?

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 2/6/2013 10:43:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Very Well!
  1. Date: 2/6/2013 8:40:00 AM

    congrads on your win Richard..

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 2/6/2013 9:21:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks
  1. Date: 2/6/2013 3:57:00 AM

    Big congrats once more Richard , xx

  1. Date: 2/5/2013 11:50:00 PM

    Wonderful and beautiful piece,Richard.I love this write,lover boy.hahaha! Congrats on your superb win.Keep flying pal.

  1. Date: 2/5/2013 6:50:00 PM

    Charming, charming ,charming now that you have written romance in the Winter..what will you write for Spring? Congrad's Light & Love

  1. Date: 2/5/2013 6:35:00 PM

    Richard congrats on your win. Warm Smiles, Connie

  1. Date: 2/5/2013 2:47:00 PM

    Might I suggest bring the WHOLE write into the present tense? It will make it even more immediate and involving for the reader and mesh better with the haiku concept. [even though the haiku MOMENT is in the past we reveal it as if we were there in the MOMENT]-4th line from the bottom capital [Once] Light & Love

  1. Date: 1/30/2013 9:22:00 AM

    Very touching excellent poem written by a very good poet. I saw that you view another poet named Margherita Russo she's only 14 and I know it would mean alot for her to have you read her newest poem if you have the time. Thank you very much.

  1. Date: 1/20/2013 3:42:00 PM

    yup yup :)

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/20/2013 3:45:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    ;0) thanks
  1. Date: 1/19/2013 4:46:00 PM

    Good imagery, and about luck and beauty ;)

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/19/2013 5:38:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Better to be lucky than good. Thanks for commenting.
  1. Date: 1/18/2013 10:49:00 PM

    wow, if this is based on your true life story, It's amazing! and then to use it in this haliban contest. I love this! (or is it halibun? All I know is that I have not even attempted this one!!)

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/19/2013 5:37:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Not sure which it is. Yes written from experience. I'm glad you liked it.
  1. Date: 1/17/2013 12:11:00 PM

    Wow! Love this one! Captured my attention from the start.

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/17/2013 6:01:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I am glad you like it. Hugs Rick
  1. Date: 1/17/2013 11:15:00 AM

    Richard you gotta go out there and make sure you get what you want....I like...David

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/17/2013 6:02:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks David
  1. Date: 1/17/2013 10:23:00 AM

    Without having read the details of the mix it up contest, I gotta say I enjoyed how he took control of his own fate and put himself out there. If you don't go after something, you'll never get it. Or as I always told my kids "If you don't ask, you don't get." I love this.

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/17/2013 6:04:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I have heard women appreciate a guy who knows what he wants. My wife says if I wasn't willing to put myself out there we would not have met.
    Shetley Avatar Thvia Shetley Date: 1/17/2013 10:29:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Instant irony here, I left this page open to check another tab and was presented with this appropriate little gem: There are three types of people in this world - Those who make thing happen, those who watch things happen, and those who wonder what happened. I may have to change my creedo!
  1. Date: 1/17/2013 6:25:00 AM

    Soup mail my friend........

  1. Date: 1/17/2013 5:10:00 AM

    Lol, love the story! So that is how it is. So enjoyed! Good luck with the contest, Richard :)

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/17/2013 6:03:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Toquyen.
  1. Date: 1/16/2013 9:41:00 PM

    Richard, wow.... love the romantic image... a bit chilly in the snow...but you know best... good luck in the contest...xox~LINDA

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/17/2013 6:04:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I should have called it ice capades.
  1. Date: 1/16/2013 9:01:00 PM

    This is really such a story, love it! It just like a movie which played on my imagination, right away to my fave box :D - hug, yanny

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/17/2013 6:04:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Yanny I am so honoured you liked it
  1. Date: 1/16/2013 7:41:00 PM

    great write Richard......winning wishes

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/17/2013 6:05:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks for the good wishes.
  1. Date: 1/16/2013 7:11:00 PM

    Very romantic write Richard, enjoyed your poetry tonight, great entry, xxx

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/16/2013 7:21:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks!
  1. Date: 1/16/2013 7:00:00 PM

    great writing!

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/16/2013 7:07:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I meant they love The Situation. Darn these small keyboards *lol*
    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/16/2013 7:06:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks, now I know what people mean when they say the love The Situation. Thanks for the visit.