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Taken Hopelessly

It’s twilight time; we’re lying on the sand
Beneath a splendid sky, limbs intertwined.
I only have to close my eyes and then
I’m taken to this place inside my mind.

The scent of you, your breath upon my cheek,
The whisper of your eyelashes on mine;
The long and tender kiss that leaves me weak.
I’m taken to a place that is divine!

But you are far away. . . I don’t know where.
I know my fantasies cannot come true.
yet never have I ceased imagining
Since being taken hopelessly with you.


For Black Eyed Susan's Contest "Taken"

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  1. Date: 2/20/2013 6:03:00 AM

    Just full of passion and longing...and a winner...congrats!

  1. Date: 2/15/2013 12:40:00 PM

    It certainly appears that you are fully taken! Nice one. Thanks for your comments. I am not very famiar with that first song, so I'm going to look it up and listen to it. You have a great day!

  1. Date: 1/26/2013 8:46:00 PM

    So romantic Andrea, and your rhyme is superb as always. Congratulations on your first place win!......

  1. Date: 1/25/2013 7:07:00 PM

    Andrea, congratulations with your amazing win.. xox~PD

  1. Date: 1/22/2013 2:35:00 PM

    Oh ..I want a sonnet..give us 2 more lines woven in there ;) ;) Conrad's on your winning writes. Light & Love

  1. Date: 1/20/2013 7:37:00 PM

    Andrea, congrats on your 1st place win with this lovely, romantic poem! Love, Kim

  1. Date: 1/20/2013 3:22:00 PM

    Congrats on your win. It is a poem that I think a lot of us can relate to.

  1. Date: 1/20/2013 3:15:00 PM

    Well done. A geat entry. Congratulations. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 1/20/2013 12:30:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win!

  1. Date: 1/20/2013 11:38:00 AM

    I knew this would be number one....congrats Andrea

  1. Date: 1/20/2013 11:08:00 AM

    Wrist ache again Andy gonna make that paste stamp xx

  1. Date: 1/18/2013 6:35:00 PM

    Andea, a clever take on the taken topic on which I couldn't think up one however much I tried. And a real passionate one at that. Thnx, Andea, I just took off the hyphens and am I right to think that the expression does not seem to look poor for the change? Luv!! Jag

  1. Date: 1/17/2013 7:48:00 AM

    Sure winner here Andrea. Loved this one really, perfect entry for the contest. Thank you dear for liking and placing my entry in your contest. Congraats to you too on your many wins!

  1. Date: 1/17/2013 7:23:00 AM

    Hi Andrea love this got to go get a cold shower now, good luck in the contest, all the best Owen

  1. Date: 1/16/2013 9:59:00 PM

    It is a winner, Andrea. I love it! It expresses well the idea of being taken -helplessly and involuntarily, lol.

  1. Date: 1/16/2013 8:59:00 PM

    Hola, Andrea,,, the contest Susan, is sponsoring reminds me of a movie called "TAKEN." but i like the taken in your poem... you go go!!! follow that passion missing around you... well I know I love this poem... i like the place you took them kisses toooo... always DP

  1. Date: 1/16/2013 3:02:00 PM

    I like this poem. Good work - JH

  1. Date: 1/16/2013 2:38:00 PM

    So close and yet so far. As if existing on another star. Two hearts and souls become as one. And now my little quip is done. Tootles. :)

  1. Date: 1/16/2013 2:11:00 PM

    Andrea very romantic and sexy, good luck...David soup mail..

  1. Date: 1/16/2013 10:57:00 AM

    ohh myy !! So sentimental and loving !! You write a quatain so well..a complicated form to me. But one day, I'll succeed !! Best of luck in the contest, it's a winner to me !!

  1. Date: 1/16/2013 10:50:00 AM

    Andrea; This is good, really good. They are good fantasies. Thanks for sharing. I know you will win. Lucilla

  1. Date: 1/16/2013 10:28:00 AM

    Hi sweet lovely Andrea.I soo love to thanakyou for your beautiful card and awesome poetry attached.I will send you a soupmail when i have some longer quality time dear.Christie is sick with wheezing and coughing.Its her first being this sick..so im a bit concerned but she ll be fine dear.Did you hear anything from Linda?and what about nikko carolyn raul james p.Its been long taoo

  1. Date: 1/16/2013 6:12:00 AM

    Beautifully romantic . It caresses the soul without leaving the heart untouched! Thank you!

  1. Date: 1/16/2013 5:43:00 AM

    this is beautiful Andrea, really beautiful, you do not need any luck with this in the contest.. the sheer injection of love in this poem is astouding

  1. Date: 1/16/2013 1:44:00 AM

    Your romantic poem leaves me all 'hot and bothered'! I love it. And may I say how much I appreciate your many encouraging comments. Thank you, from this humble scribe. Charles.

  1. Date: 1/15/2013 9:18:00 PM

    wonderful write Andrea

  1. Date: 1/15/2013 6:19:00 PM

    your romantic poems are really wonderful and this one is up there at the top - just lovely!

  1. Date: 1/15/2013 5:16:00 PM

    This is one of the sweetest romantic poems I've read in a long time. I love it. I'm adding it to my favourites :)

  1. Date: 1/15/2013 4:39:00 PM

    Yeah...got it !

  1. Date: 1/15/2013 3:40:00 PM

    Wow, this is a truly tremendous and awesome write my friend! I am enthralled by the remarkable and masterful poem that you have written here Andrea! I truly loved reading this wonderful and brilliant piece this afternoon! What a fantastic poem, Great Work!!

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