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Jungle War

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Jungle War

So thick with rain,the rancid air
into the jungle pours.
Young soldiers with their feet on fire
keep on despite the sores.

This war is one that no one wants
and no one understands.
Young men and women give their lives
in these far Asian lands.

Back home these kids are shown disdain;
they're spit upon and worse.
When they come home from Viet Nam
in airports they are cursed.

A blight upon our history
was this long standing war.
But we should show the vets respect
for suffering they bore.




written by Deb Wilson 
January 12th, 2013
for contest "Historical Modified Quatrain"

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  1. Date: 2/14/2013 11:53:00 PM

    Another congratulations for a very fine win, Deb! A blight indeed. Well done. Luv,Annalise

  1. Date: 2/11/2013 2:40:00 AM

    This well worded poem conveys well the anamosity and lack of appreciation these soldiers felt and what a sad welcome home many received, especially when they tried to get help for injuries caused by that war. Things have changed because of what they endured. Excellent winning entry Deb. Congratulations!

  1. Date: 2/10/2013 8:49:00 PM

    Deb, this is one of my favorite contest... love it... Congratulations, with your amazing poems. Always~ LINDA

  1. Date: 2/10/2013 7:42:00 PM

    Congratulations on poem and win. Love, joyce

  1. Date: 2/10/2013 6:13:00 PM

    How many Vietnam's have we had since the USA was birthed? It's beyond sad. Congrad's on your win! Light & Love

  1. Date: 2/10/2013 12:59:00 PM

    Indeed a bleak time in American History, when those who paid the price to fight, were ridiculed on our soil. Congrats on your win in the contest.

  1. Date: 2/10/2013 12:26:00 PM

    First time Deb!! Damn good!

  1. Date: 2/10/2013 12:10:00 PM

    A great tribute - for vets everywhere. Congratulations on your win, Deb. Love, Su

  1. Date: 1/20/2013 4:07:00 PM

    Good Message!

  1. Date: 1/15/2013 8:54:00 AM

    this is a wonderful poem Deb,, highlighting the mood of the times,, and yes those young men and woman would are sent to do someones elses bidding... they are Hero,, as far as i'm concerned...love this to my fav....

  1. Date: 1/14/2013 1:18:00 AM

    Loved this poem. I am a novice and wish to learn this form. I'm so glad that I chose this one to read and the comments are enlightening. Just one question: Syllable count and iambic meter are not always the same thing (as I have been led to believe). Therefore, my question is this: Line 4 of the first stanza: Keep ON desPITE the SOres (daDa daDA daDA da) Where “sores” is read as “sor-es”. This thows out the iambic trimeter of: * / | * / | * / Feedback would be greatly appreciated. Love, Su

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards Date: 1/14/2013 1:55:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    This brings me back to the old question of dialect per country and/or region - elaborated upon on Craig's blog.
    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards Date: 1/14/2013 1:35:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    For example [from my effort to write a quatrain]: "Business" is pronounced "bus'ness" (two syllables); but "businesses" has three syllables. Plural and past tense change the emphasis and extends the syllable count and/or the iambic meter.
  1. Date: 1/13/2013 1:25:00 PM

    It was and is all too sad for words aye? A good point to highlight. Light & Love

  1. Date: 1/13/2013 10:44:00 AM

    A great poem by you here Deb.Enjoyed very much.

  1. Date: 1/13/2013 10:35:00 AM

    As a Vietnam vet I can surely appreciate and identify with this fine poem, Deb...although I did not suffer the kind of abuse you mentioned, I know well the accounts of vets being spit on, called 'baby killers' and even assaulted by members and allies of yes, 'The Peace Movement'...most of these protesters were rich, spoiled college brats who didn't have have a clue what the real world was about...I will stop rambling now - Tim

  1. Date: 1/13/2013 10:01:00 AM

    Well said! The vets deserve respect to say the least. One cannot sacrifice ones life for his country and get contempt in return for his services. Beautifully written! Thank you!

  1. Date: 1/13/2013 9:17:00 AM

    Deb, just excellent...David

  1. Date: 1/13/2013 7:36:00 AM

    Deb, Great Job! Love everything including the historical theme. One minor stutter in line four first quatrain. It's 7 syllables because of going and going throws off your terrific use of meter--perhaps using ( on) here---try using on instead of going and see how it reads. Even if you used on in another context in the previous line I still think it works okay and it corrects the syllable count and meter---Love this Deb!

    Wilson Avatar Deb Wilson Date: 1/13/2013 12:21:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thanks Craig..I corrected it and thanks for the advice..it took me awhile to get this form figured out..I'm glad I mostly did it right!