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Down for the Count

A boxer in the ring may think
He’s getting all the breaks;
Then bam! he’s down, for just like that,
One punch is all it takes.

I know exactly how he feels
For suddenly, today,
Whatever energy I had
Quite quickly drained away.

It happened as I headed home
From taking in a movie.
The walk was twenty-seven blocks,
But I was feeling groovy.

The last few streets seemed very long
And man, I sure was sweating.
I hoped that it was not the flu
That somehow I was getting.

I made it home and hit the couch
And fell into a sleep;
My dinner plans for later on
I knew I couldn’t keep.

Whatever hit me, from left field,
Was surely tantamount
To reeling from a punch that sent me
Flat out for the count.

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  1. Date: 2/9/2013 9:15:00 AM

    Perfect rhythm! You even have some long words in there that can be hard to place. Describing your feelings on the page comes natural to you.

  1. Date: 1/12/2013 9:11:00 AM

    Using a boxer's dilemma to describe your own feelings of total exhaustion is brilliant! Your flow and rhyming are excellent as always. Well done Ilene!! Best wishes, Keith

  1. Date: 1/12/2013 4:43:00 AM

    take a real life situation, and girl don't you bring it on home to the reader... this is wonderful ilene, i felt i was there in the poem with you it was so visual,, this poem has just walked it way in to my fav... you are gem,,,, oh and by the way,, i hope you are feeling better....