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An Imperfect Nine

She gave me a drink
Wine Potion Numer Nine
She said not to worry
in a moment I'd be fine

My head it felt woozy
I finished up the wine
I thought she was a six
Now here she is a nine

I couldn't believe my luck
I think I am in love
She's my little Angel
A gift from up above

My friends are so confused
She must have cast a spell
They say she aint good looking
and there is that awful smell

How could this have happened
I'm still trapped in her spell
In my mind she is a Nine
So I'll kiss and never tell

Lower poem conforms to contest rules for Number 9 Contest
Nine lines Nine words per line. I used nine three times because 3x3 is nine.
I kept the original poem because that was my first inspiration.


She gave me a drink, wine potion number nine
She said "trust me in a moment you'll be fine."

My head felt woozy, I finished up the wine
Who knew a six could end up a nine

My friend warned me it must be a spell
She ain't good lookin and there's that funny smell

Still I see her as an angel I'm captivated
My body and mind are no longer related

I am her slave and she is my Nine.

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  1. Date: 1/11/2013 6:42:00 PM

    Haha, I love the line with the funny smell- that's hilarious! Good 'nine' poem Rick, much luck in the contest- although I know you won't need it!

  1. Date: 1/11/2013 12:26:00 AM

    Great inspirations of nine Rick! I was about to write the nine as well before, but seeking for some mood and inspirations around about nine, yet found any :p i enjoyed both of them, for me they are amazing :)

  1. Date: 1/10/2013 9:56:00 PM

    lol Rick you always amaze me (and amuze me) with your creativity! :) this is so cute!

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/10/2013 11:29:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Becca, this was fun.
  1. Date: 1/10/2013 6:31:00 PM

    hAha, love what you did with that theme. I sure remember love potion number nine. It's a great song. It is fun to see where people's minds go to with the theme of nine!!

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/10/2013 11:30:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I had to rewrite when I realized I didn't follow directions. See lower half with rewrite.
  1. Date: 1/10/2013 6:29:00 PM

    Laughing !! ohh myyy !! Wine tinted glasses !! Enjoyed !!

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/10/2013 11:31:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Debra, hoy to entertain.
  1. Date: 1/10/2013 6:23:00 PM

    This is a phenomenal and enlightening write my friend! I truly enjoyed reading this delightful and amazing poem this evening! What an intriguing piece, Great Work!!

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/10/2013 11:31:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks russell
  1. Date: 1/10/2013 5:19:00 PM

    Cute..Got a chuckle..There was this man that we knew and he said that he never been to bed with an ugly woman but had woke up with quite a few..Enjoyed reading your creative work..I hope that the person of whom you have written doesn't wake up with a headache..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/10/2013 11:32:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Ha ha, you made me laugh as well, thanks.