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Spring

refreshing spring breeze
carries perfume through the air
swallow’s playful flight

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  1. Date: 1/10/2013 3:42:00 PM

    I like this...just as it is !! I see it and smell it !! Lovely haiku !!

  1. Date: 1/9/2013 11:06:00 AM

    You are getting the idea! 2 lines connected gramatically & conceptually & a surprise perseption in line 3! now remember you need not do 5/7/5 [certainly you can but...] [a perfumed breeze/brushes my cheek--swallows pass] //saying perfumed SHOWS you spring without telling us it is spring ;) just rying to show you..simplify.. keep in mind //Jack Kerouac advise a real haiku's gotta be as simple as porridge. Light & Love