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WOLVES OF FATHOMS DEEP

All is still in deceptions abyss,
Beneath fathoms deep, aquatic, 
Wolves are on the hunt.
Stealth predators unseen, unheard,
Hanging on the fringe of detections,
Outer limits.
In plain black and white, 
Behold a deadly beauty personified,
Intelligence next step in evolution.
These devils of the bluest depths,
Known as the Orca.
Camilla’s blending between shadows
 Darkness, ,
And the suns rays penetrating,
From above.
Waiting in the quite shallows, 
They hide in anticipation, 
For the right moment to strike.
Titans Krakens, await for the first
Signs of weakness in their prey.
Together pack mammals work,
Combing talents to best formulate,
A strategy for the imminent attack.
Upon life's rookery a chilling, 
Silence falls.
Young seals sleek and fast,
Taste freedom's excitement,
With wonderment's exhilaration,
To finally be on there own at last.
The open ocean calls to them,
Come challenge my waves,
Youthful innocence, boldly splash
Amongst surf and spray.
Yet beware thy kindred spirits,
Those whom seek the unknown,
May pay a high price of flesh, 
And bone.
But these young pups hear the
Siren’s voices,
And heed not the warning tone.
Sliding instead into the icy waters
Cold embrace.
The undertows current carry’s them,
Towards the coral reef.
Deadly jaws haunt the tidal rift's,
Rough jagged edge,
It is a gruesome rule of survival.
Few new yearling return unscathed,
Some don't return at all.
The arch angels of death must take,
Their poundage of flesh.
With a grinning smile,
Natures perfect killing machines, 
 The wolves of the deep, await the
Next  bloody hunt.
With hungry eyes anticipation,
Tasting satisfactions mouthwatering
Bites yet to come and relishing the 
Thoughts with feedish pleasure sheer
Delight.



BY: CHERYL ANNA DUNN



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  1. Date: 1/13/2013 7:28:00 AM

    The title of the poem tells us what the poem is probably about. Maybe allowing the for the title to lure the reader may help, and have the Sea Wolves be known as your last line. Your talking about a fantastic species, give them the last word. Other than my words, I enjoyed it.

  1. Date: 1/12/2013 7:42:00 PM

    I agree that less is more...but I found it a captive read, though lengthy. Cyndi an Debbi both gave good feedback. You have talent just need to hone your skills.... Blessings !!

  1. Date: 1/12/2013 5:01:00 PM

    I only have a minute or two. I enjoyed the images you've evoked, you really have captured the drama of sea life, here. Now, as far as suggestions go, LESS is MORE. I suggest that you prune some areas which may repeat image/action. like Titans/Krackens or Rough/Jagged... Also, try to avoid all cliche at all cost, ie poundage of flesh, angel of death. I loved the FRESHNESS of "Life's rookery" (awesome and original. Also, I found the format hard to read. Keep writing, you have a great voice!

  1. Date: 1/12/2013 4:49:00 PM

    soup mail...

  1. Date: 1/12/2013 4:22:00 PM

    wonderful exciting content, my only suggestion would be to leave more in each line so the write isn't so spread out and give the reader a few line breaks [where what might have been a paragraph/a topic ends] Light & Love