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Debra Squyres

Date: 1/12/2013 7:54:00 PM

Third one for me too...and I too see your love of the ocean and it's inhabitants. Beautiful images you have painted here with words...but again, more is less. I'm not worthy to critique, but some of the ladies and gents are. I've enjoyed. Be sure to reciprocate or you'll find less readers in the future. Don't look for everyone to comment back, some read and don't comment for their own reasons. Blessings to you with your craft.

Ruben O.

Date: 1/12/2013 4:50:00 PM

Well, this is the third one of your poems that I've read and I can "see" that the sea...the ocean...the mother water... is a great source of inspiration to you! : ) Deborah already told you about the line breaks (or stanzas); I would suggest you to make stronger ending: the ending must accomplish something. It's my humble opinion; I hope you has no problems with this kind of comments. Have a great night. Ruben.