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LONELY

It’s dusky and smoky in the room. People are talking too loudly, laughing at a joke of which the punch line was lost in the din. I shift my weight on the stool – the dimensions not quite fitting my shape. My skirt rides up my thighs. I leave it there and pick up a stare from across the room. Not quite sure if it was meant for me, I notice a slumped punter lift his glass in a salute. I nod and turn reluctantly back to my half empty glass on the counter. A cautious tap on my shoulder quickens my pulse. It is late and my head is fuzzy from the G & T’s, but this attention is most definitely meant for me. He mumbles sweet nothings. Well, that is what it sounds like through his whiskey breath slurring. He picks up my flimsy wrap and drapes it over my shoulders. The touch from another human being feels good on my naked skin. I let him kiss me on the lips and do not protest when he calls for another round. I cannot remember when last someone has sweet talked me. It is getting very late and the prospect of being alone fills me with dread. In the dark corners of the bar people are trying to expel the mutual fear of being lonely.
****************************************************************** GLOSSARY Persona Literary Term refers to the narrator or speaker of the poem, not to be confused with the author - a narrative voice other than the poet tells the entire poem. The expression derives from the Greek word "persona" meaning mask. When the poet creates a character to be the speaker, that character is called the persona and the poet imagines what it is like to enter someone else's personality. This is an example of a poem where I have used persona. It usually reflects the thoughts of the speaker and they are not necessarily the personal experiences of the poet, ie the poet places himself in the shoes of the other person and comments on a scene observed. It is a difficult format to write in as as the poet needs to keep in character throughout the poem and it tends to deviate from the usual voice of the poet.

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  1. Date: 8/12/2014 11:17:00 AM
    Wonderful write, Suzette. Congrats. Nice going. xxxRalph

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 8/19/2014 1:25:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, Ralph, :-)
  1. Date: 8/11/2014 3:08:00 PM
    Not sure why you felt you had to tell us that definition at the end? It was a refreshingly realistic verse! BIG hugs!Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 8/11/2014 3:16:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Hi Deb. It is quite simple really: After the blog by Eileen G regarding people reading perhaps too much into a poem and some "unsolicited" comments I have received in the past on some of my poems, I would rather spell it out to the reader what the difference between fact and Persona is, than leave it to chance. Thanks for the wishes. Love, su
  1. Date: 8/11/2014 4:07:00 AM
    Oh Suzette sucha lovely n unique write, congrats on huge win!

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 8/11/2014 4:14:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you, Dr Sharma, for this compliment. Su
  1. Date: 8/10/2014 11:07:00 PM
    qUITE AN UNIQUE WRITE, cONGREATSON THE WIN, sUZETTE

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 8/11/2014 2:49:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you, Dr Mehta.
  1. Date: 8/10/2014 8:36:00 PM
    Suzette, a nice write on the rotgut lonely ones. Congrats for the win. Mohan

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 8/11/2014 2:50:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, Mohan :-)
  1. Date: 8/10/2014 5:45:00 PM
    Excellent write Suzette. it deserved the win, my friend...Congratulations....peter

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 8/11/2014 2:51:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, Peter. :-)
  1. Date: 8/10/2014 5:32:00 PM
    Great addition to the story, and a much deserved winner! Well done!

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 8/11/2014 2:52:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you, Cas. Love, Su
  1. Date: 8/10/2014 3:47:00 PM
    a novel write. congratulations. Love, joyce

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 8/11/2014 2:52:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you, Joyce. Love, Su
  1. Date: 8/10/2014 3:04:00 PM
    Congratulations! So many different takes on this contest.

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 8/11/2014 2:54:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you, Faye. I loved the concept of it forming part of the whole, nl the town of Rotgut. Love, Su
  1. Date: 8/10/2014 2:31:00 PM
    A fine write.. Congrats on this win!!!!

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 8/11/2014 2:55:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you, Rob. :-)
  1. Date: 8/10/2014 1:31:00 PM
    You brought to life the darkness, and loneliness of how it must feel to be lost in the din of the town of RotGut! Well versed in this sad story, Suzanne!!

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 8/10/2014 1:34:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, Carrie. It was a most enjoyable contest to enter. Love, Su
  1. Date: 8/10/2014 12:46:00 PM
    Congratulations on a great win - I had a good time reading this well-written piece! Pandita

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 8/10/2014 1:03:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you, Pandita. :-)
  1. Date: 8/10/2014 11:59:00 AM
    An great and awesome poem you've penned and I'm so delighted to read it tonight my very dear friend Su. Thank u so much for sharing. Congratulations on your win! Biggest hugs and cheers! love lots, Leonora

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 8/10/2014 1:04:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you, my friend. Hope you are well. Love and Hugs, Su
  1. Date: 8/10/2014 10:55:00 AM
    A sad but true story, well writted. Congrats on your win.

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 8/10/2014 1:02:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, Dave.
  1. Date: 8/10/2014 10:35:00 AM
    Congratulations on your win. It was interesting.

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 8/10/2014 1:06:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Sorry, Carol. PS is jumping all over the place tonight. Thanks for the comment. Love, Su
    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 8/10/2014 1:01:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, Jan :-)
  1. Date: 8/10/2014 9:45:00 AM
    many congratulations on this wonderful write:-) Hugs jan xx

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 8/10/2014 1:08:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Now, let me try again .... lol. Comments are jumping all over the place tonight. Thanks for the compliment, Jan. Love, Su
  1. Date: 2/4/2013 6:51:00 AM
    awww lovely! 'twas deserving win!!

  1. Date: 2/2/2013 1:44:00 AM
    Hmmmm...now just where in the heck did you get that nick-name or yours? Frankly, I think you could you could have come up with something a little better than that!...Did you make it up yourself or did some old fool make it up for you?...Thanks my friend!...The ultimate compliment...

  1. Date: 1/25/2013 11:11:00 PM
    I am stunned and awed by this poem, Su...I am right there in that bar..perfect - Tim

  1. Date: 1/23/2013 11:04:00 AM
    My big congratulations on your first place, Suzette! Your poem expresses the deep feeling of loneliness that we experience from time to time, and in your case, it was in a crowded room of a bar, " people are trying to expel the feeling of being lonely. " I wish you all the best in the New Year. Peace and Love, Andrew.

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