Submit Your Poems
Get Your Premium Membership
Quote of the Day

Quote Left"A contented mind is the greatest blessing a man can enjoy in this world."Quote Right

by Joseph Addison

  |  Comment

See and share Beautiful Nature Photos and amazing photos of interesting places

LONELY

Suzette Richards Avatar  Send Soup Mail  Block poet from commenting on your poetry

Below is the poem entitled LONELY which was written by poet Suzette Richards. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

Read Poems by Suzette Richards

Best Suzette Richards Poems

+ Fav Poet

LONELY

It’s dusky and smoky in the room. People are talking too loudly, laughing at a joke of which the punch line was lost in the din. I shift my weight on the stool – the dimensions not quite fitting my shape. My skirt rides up my thighs. I leave it there and pick up a stare from across the room. Not quite sure if it was meant for me, I notice a slumped punter lift his glass in a salute. I nod and turn reluctantly back to my half empty glass on the counter. A cautious tap on my shoulder quickens my pulse. It is late and my head is fuzzy from the G & T’s, but this attention is most definitely meant for me. He mumbles sweet nothings. Well, that is what it sounds like through his whiskey breath slurring. He picks up my flimsy wrap and drapes it over my shoulders. The touch from another human being feels good on my naked skin. I let him kiss me on the lips and do not protest when he calls for another round. I cannot remember when last someone has sweet talked me. It is getting very late and the prospect of being alone fills me with dread. In the dark corners of the bar people are trying to expel the mutual fear of being lonely.
****************************************************************** GLOSSARY Persona Literary Term refers to the narrator or speaker of the poem, not to be confused with the author - a narrative voice other than the poet tells the entire poem. The expression derives from the Greek word "persona" meaning mask. When the poet creates a character to be the speaker, that character is called the persona and the poet imagines what it is like to enter someone else's personality. This is an example of a poem where I have used persona. It usually reflects the thoughts of the speaker and they are not necessarily the personal experiences of the poet, ie the poet places himself in the shoes of the other person and comments on a scene observed. It is a difficult format to write in as as the poet needs to keep in character throughout the poem and it tends to deviate from the usual voice of the poet.

Post Comments

Please Login to post a comment
  1. Date: 2/4/2013 6:51:00 AM
    awww lovely! 'twas deserving win!!

  1. Date: 2/2/2013 1:44:00 AM
    Hmmmm...now just where in the heck did you get that nick-name or yours? Frankly, I think you could you could have come up with something a little better than that!...Did you make it up yourself or did some old fool make it up for you?...Thanks my friend!...The ultimate compliment...

  1. Date: 1/25/2013 11:11:00 PM
    I am stunned and awed by this poem, Su...I am right there in that bar..perfect - Tim

  1. Date: 1/23/2013 11:04:00 AM
    My big congratulations on your first place, Suzette! Your poem expresses the deep feeling of loneliness that we experience from time to time, and in your case, it was in a crowded room of a bar, " people are trying to expel the feeling of being lonely. " I wish you all the best in the New Year. Peace and Love, Andrew.

  1. Date: 1/22/2013 6:50:00 PM
    Congrats, Suzette. Outstanding. Well deserved win. xxxRalph

  1. Date: 1/22/2013 1:50:00 PM
    Wow, this really got to me big time. You most certainly wrote it so well and I can guarantee you many can relate. Loneliness is devastating, and sometimes we do what we must, whether it leads to regret or not. Your imagery so excellent, I congratulate you on an excellent first place win. Hugs, shar xoxo

  1. Date: 1/22/2013 10:43:00 AM
    Thank goodness I have never had to resort to these antics to drive out the feeling of loneliness - I'm just a keen observer ;-) My friends and family had, thankfully, always rallied round me. Thank you for the compliments. Love, Su

  1. Date: 1/22/2013 9:53:00 AM
    Though I have spend years dealing with my feelings of loneliness and abandonment I have come to realize that all we need do is relate to who ever is around us because we are NOT really alone ;). Congrad's on this fine write winning. Light & Love

  1. Date: 1/22/2013 8:53:00 AM
    Dark and lonely, this poem speaks volumns. Well done, Suzette!!

  1. Date: 1/22/2013 8:28:00 AM
    AWESOME write, Su!! Congrats on a well deserved win!

  1. Date: 1/22/2013 6:53:00 AM
    congrats on a great win Su

  1. Date: 1/22/2013 2:17:00 AM
    hey I remember this one,,,,Congrats on ur yet another well deserved win dear...<3

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 1/22/2013 2:29:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Now polished and extended.... Thanks, friend <3
  1. Date: 1/21/2013 11:36:00 PM
    really good one, congrats on your win

  1. Date: 1/21/2013 8:45:00 PM
    This is really good, I see why it was chosen. Congrats

  1. Date: 1/21/2013 8:33:00 PM
    Congratulations on your 1st place win Suzette, a humanistic approach to the contest, worthy of it's honor, xxxx

  1. Date: 1/21/2013 7:55:00 PM
    Su----thank you for this masterpiece!!!!! This takes "It's quarter ta three there's no one in the place sept you and me---so set em up Joe" to a completely wonderful level.------faving this!!

  1. Date: 1/21/2013 7:39:00 PM
    Booz goes with lonely like mashed potatoes with gravy and you tell it so well. CONGRATULATIONS on you First Place win with awesome write.

  1. Date: 1/21/2013 7:08:00 PM
    Congratulations Suzette....Seren

  1. Date: 1/7/2013 5:29:00 AM
    Thanks Suz, I THINK I got it ;) The minute I sent off the comment..then I relooked and it of course popped right out at me, thanks again for the quick response. Light & Love

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 1/7/2013 7:01:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    You are welcome, Deb
  1. Date: 1/6/2013 3:14:00 PM
    Suz can you please do another blog or soup mail me re the Zilla form I see no internal rhyme in c1, c2? and what line are you calling c2? thanks in advance L & L