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The Diet ---

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The Diet ---

Skin is the best part of a nugget
Kentucky cooling in the bucket
        Slush Puppies to chase
        Forming my dietary base
Worrying about my weight  .....  f(orget) ‘t!

Please see the About section for further notes regarding Limericks.

4 Jan 2013

Please note that this poem was run up in a flash and not accurate in so far as meter is concerned - check the date it was written: I was still recovering from all the work over the festive season... :-) Here follows an update for the purist among you:

Skin is the best part of a nugget
Kentucky now cooling in bucket
        Slush Puppies to chase
        Forms dietary base
Worrying about my weight  .....  f(orget) ‘t!

Written in amphibrachic meter: In other words, how I speak and where the stresses fall naturally for my speach patern. 
Lines 1, 2 and 5: */*; ending with a feminine syllable
Lines 3 and 4: truncated to 5 syllable, ending in masculine syllable: */*l*/
Per my notes in the About section: "In other words, it’s got nine syllables to the long lines and six to the short ones, although it is not uncommon to leave a syllable out." 

FROM A PAGE DEDICATED TO THE CORRECT WRITING OF LIMERICKS:
The classic limerick is an anapestic trimeter of five lines with the rhyming scheme AABBA.
It is possible, although not the classic form, to replace all the anapests with amphibrachs,
but they cannot be mixed.

(The anapest [or anapaest] is a beat of UUS [Unstressed-Unstressed-Stressed] -
not to be confused with a dactyl [SUU] which should not be used in limericks.
The amphibrach is a beat of USU.)

There are three beats in the first, second and fifth lines of a limerick
and two in the third and fourth:-

Diddy-DUM diddy-DUM diddy-DUM
Diddy-DUM diddy-DUM diddy-DUM
Diddy-DUM diddy-DOM
Diddy-DUM diddy-DOM
Diddy-DUM diddy-DUM diddy-DUM

An extra syllable or a syllable fewer may sometimes be tolerated
if all the lines with the same rhyme have the same structure.

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  1. Date: 1/18/2013 3:10:00 PM
    You must start with an unstressed word Suz or you are off on the wrong foot ;) Congrad's on your win! Light & Love

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 1/19/2013 10:05:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    OK... I have updated and elaborated the poem. Yes, all Limericks must start with one or two unstressed syllables, but NEVER with a stressed syllable..... ;-)
    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 1/19/2013 3:26:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    The About section gives you a clue as to where I'm going with this Limerick ... ;-)
    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 1/18/2013 11:53:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    lol.... It is not the beginning, but the ending (how I finish) that counts.... ;-)
  1. Date: 1/18/2013 2:11:00 PM
    Good job..That KFC is good but I am sure not healthy..Congrats on your winnning work..Sara

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 1/19/2013 3:13:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    It was just a fun ditty and I did not expect to win place. Thank you, Sara.
  1. Date: 1/17/2013 11:33:00 PM
    I loved it the first time! Congrats, Suz.

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 1/19/2013 3:13:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    :-) Thanks for all your support, Andrea.
  1. Date: 1/16/2013 5:29:00 PM
    Congrats, Suz, got a laugh out of it!! Jag

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 1/19/2013 3:12:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    I guess that you have to been exposed to the British English to "get it".... Limerick is after all a British invention... ;-)
  1. Date: 1/15/2013 10:43:00 AM
    Congrats Su on your win in the contest.Enjoyed your Limerick.

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 1/19/2013 3:14:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Glad you enjoyed it, Kash. :-)
  1. Date: 1/15/2013 7:44:00 AM
    Congratulations Su xx

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 1/19/2013 3:16:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Mandy. I might have not done justice to the form, but I had fun "punning" words... ;-)
  1. Date: 1/11/2013 2:38:00 PM
    The best part of a diet is to try it, if it doesn't work don't decry it. Sure made me chuckle Suzette :)

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 1/19/2013 3:17:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    lol.... James. Glad it got a chuckle from you :-)
  1. Date: 1/5/2013 4:46:00 AM
    hey cleverly done

  1. Date: 1/4/2013 8:40:00 PM
    Good one. I see you think like I do!

  1. Date: 1/4/2013 6:14:00 PM
    Clever limerick Suzette, Connie

    Richards Avatar Suzette Richards
    Date: 1/19/2013 3:21:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, Connie :-)