The Fool by Richard Lamoureux

The Fool

I didn't see you watching As I made myself the fool Irreversible damage I'm no longer cool I wanted your approval This was my biggest mistake Because of what I have done You must think I'm fake If only I could undo Then perhaps you would be mine I just gave up everything To have a good time Sorry, I couldn't resist rhyming the last lines.

Anne Currin

Date: 1/5/2013 11:31:00 AM

I can never resist rhyming either haha, I have tried to do a free verse and I always end up rhyming! This is great Rick, it'd be nice if we could undo mistakes,but then we couldnt learn from them!

Jack Ellison

Date: 1/4/2013 8:12:00 AM

Not sure what a Dodoitsu is but enjoyed your wee poem! LOL Have a good day, Rick!

Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/4/2013 8:32:00 AM

Thanks jack

SKAT Aces-

Date: 1/3/2013 9:13:00 PM

i like the way you went ahead with the ending rhyme. LOL. Richard, I wish I knew what you got caught up in. Some desires are uncontrollable. does not mean one does not love. ~Luv*SKAT

Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/3/2013 10:00:00 PM

Suspicious mind my dear, lol.

Rollo West

Date: 1/3/2013 8:33:00 PM

Hello Richard, really a great write, funny, with a serious not. Rollo

Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/3/2013 8:57:00 PM

Thanks Rollo.

Annalise Brigham

Date: 1/3/2013 7:59:00 PM

Enjoyed this one, Richard...Light with a hint of seriousness.. I don't know too much about the rules of writing a Dodoitsu, but the rhyming is not strict so it's fine! Always, Annalise

Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/3/2013 9:01:00 PM

Thanks Annalise.

Russell Sivey

Date: 1/3/2013 7:25:00 PM

I loved the way you did these Dodoitsu! I wouldn't worry about rhyming those lines, that just adds interest to the write my friend! I really enjoyed reading this delightful and wondrous poem this evening! What a wonderful piece, you have brought a great image to my mind with this poem! Awesome Work!!

Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/3/2013 9:03:00 PM

Hey Russel,thanks for the generous comment, especialy from the dodoitsu master. Have a good night Russel.

Yanny Widjanarko

Date: 1/3/2013 7:11:00 PM

Great dodoitsu Richard, and don't worry you still look cool, hahaha :D

Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/3/2013 9:00:00 PM

I appreciate the vote of confidence.

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The Fool

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