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Moonless night I

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Moonless night I

City lights.
Notes out of tune
On Silence’s Stave.


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  1. Date: 3/18/2013 1:58:00 PM

    Deb is right on this and I have learned a lot from her. I still struggle with haiku so keep on writing. love phyl

  1. Date: 3/12/2013 1:41:00 PM

    good haiku !!

  1. Date: 12/29/2012 11:39:00 AM

    I like the contrast this one gives, Vassilis.

    Comporozos Avatar Vassilis Comporozos Date: 1/3/2013 1:02:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks a lot!
  1. Date: 12/29/2012 8:48:00 AM

    For me what you have written is not a haiku and just so both of us may have the pleasure of a poetic discussion I will state why I feel this way. By using the [.] you have taken away the feeling of an open ended experience for me, the in the moment feeling is deminishedby using not 1 but 2 periods and the use of the phrase [silence's stave] is too free verse and not as simple as porridge ;) I'd love to keep discussing this with you. Light & Love Debbie

    Comporozos Avatar Vassilis Comporozos Date: 1/3/2013 1:08:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks for your comments. I agree with what you say about the free - verse style in the last line. You're right on that point. To be precise, categorising it as haiku, I mainy mean a haiku-like poem, (producing a 'haiku effect', if I can put it this way.). A really authentic haiku must have concrete images, and that's not always easy.
  1. Date: 12/29/2012 8:29:00 AM

    I hope it is OK to call you Vass [that's one long name for someone with carpel tunnel to type LOL] thank you for noting my haiku & yes I too now understand much of what is labeled haiku on-line is not..and that my form though correct may still be an unsatisfying haiku.

    Comporozos Avatar Vassilis Comporozos Date: 1/3/2013 1:08:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    You give me food for thought and inspiration for new paths to take.I've published some haikus with concrete images, I think, here.