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In Troubled Dreams

Abandoned in the fifties after the war
A frieght elevator stuck between floors
Obsolete machinery, splintered old chairs
In a warehouse in Newark, New Jersey somewhere

Dead air presses down, stifling and thick
Something still dwells behind one of those bricks
Curled up in a ball, it waits for me there
In a warehouse in Newark, New Jersey somewhere

A musty gray vapor that whispers my name
It seeps through the wall and creeps to my brain
It sighs and it groans as my soul is laid bare
In a warehouse in Newark, New Jersey somewhere

It mumbles and moans and drones of ancient tombs
Of claustrophopic closets and dim, hollow rooms
I cry out for help, echoes answer my prayer
In a warehouse in Newark, New Jersey somewhere

The ghost of my lonely, my lost and alone
My hopeless and helpless, my can't go back home
It's looking at me now with a dull, vacant stare
In a warehouse in Newark, New Jersey somewhere


12/5/2012
Russel's 'Dreams' Contest


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  1. Date: 5/14/2013 7:01:00 AM

    You scared me here Tim, it kept building--wonderfully constructed--well deserved first!!

  1. Date: 5/11/2013 7:56:00 PM

    Such vivid imagery Tim congrats on your win , super write xxx

  1. Date: 5/11/2013 5:21:00 PM

    Tim a nightmare I'd never want to have. It kept me riveted to see how it ends. Congratulations on your well deserved win. Warm Smiles, Connie

  1. Date: 5/11/2013 1:21:00 AM

    Such a riveting poem Tim: The repeating last line in each stanza gives it a dream quality or is it a nightmare? LOL Congratulations SuZ

  1. Date: 5/10/2013 10:09:00 PM

    This is so so beautiful to read, sad. Congratulations on your win. Nice weekend. Terry xoxo

  1. Date: 4/24/2013 7:32:00 PM

    Tim, congratulations with your poem on Andrea's, favorite list. always~ Linda

  1. Date: 4/23/2013 4:50:00 PM

    Great rhythm, rhyme, and flow to this one faved by Andrea..Congrats on your honor..Sara

  1. Date: 4/22/2013 10:57:00 PM

    Many congrats dear friend.

  1. Date: 4/15/2013 2:30:00 PM

    yes, tim, it is right here. I had faved it, so you are right. Like I said, all my faves are not showing at my bio.

  1. Date: 3/1/2013 9:45:00 PM

    Oooooo!! I remember this awesome piece!! You're the bomb Tyler!!! Congrats on your well deserved win with this one. Big huggs Doritha

  1. Date: 2/28/2013 5:57:00 PM

    Outstanding, Tim Great job. Well done. Congrats. Ralph

  1. Date: 2/27/2013 4:48:00 PM

    Congratulations Tim

  1. Date: 2/27/2013 11:09:00 AM

    Congratulations, Tim. Well deserved win. Your poem is quite haunting...

  1. Date: 2/27/2013 10:48:00 AM

    Many congratulations on the top spot Tim xx

  1. Date: 2/27/2013 6:57:00 AM

    Tim this is an intriguing dream. Makes one wonder about what happened. A well deserved win. Warm Smiles, Connie

  1. Date: 2/27/2013 4:42:00 AM

    i remember this poem and am so glad to see it as a winner in the contest! most deserving!

  1. Date: 2/27/2013 3:17:00 AM

    Beauty this was touching ! Jennifer

  1. Date: 2/27/2013 1:04:00 AM

    Tim, congrats on your excellent win...David

  1. Date: 2/26/2013 8:31:00 PM

    ooo..wow Tim, glad I have not read all your poems, it makes me happy to have you on my winning list.. your poem, carries more than a vacant stare.. CONGRATULATIONS, with this awesome poem about YOU :-) LINDA

  1. Date: 2/26/2013 8:31:00 PM

    I know your tired of hearing this... Happy Birthday... xox~ LINDA

  1. Date: 1/29/2013 3:06:00 AM

    Tyson!!this is guy-wrenchingly good!!! Love the impact of repetition and flow. Well done ...Gripping!!! I have to fav this one. Big hugs love ya Daphnie

    Burch Avatar Deborah Burch Date: 1/29/2013 3:10:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I've got to start proofing this dang phone!! That would be gut-wrenching ;)
  1. Date: 1/13/2013 10:05:00 PM

    A good poem about troubled dreams. Sometimes = they seem so real and sometimes they turn into nightmares. Thanks for sharing. Also thanks for reading my poem. Lucilla

  1. Date: 12/31/2012 2:02:00 PM

    wowowowow. How did I ever miss this one?? Is it a real recurring dream of yours? Did something really happen there? It really makes the reader want to know, Tim! wEll, that was good advice you gave me. Que sera, sera. I can only do my best and put it in God's hands now. btw: I finally planned to do the N.J. contest and went to look and the contest was OFF the site. Whatever became of that contest?? I don't even see a winners list!!

  1. Date: 12/31/2012 2:02:00 PM

    fave!

  1. Date: 12/8/2012 8:03:00 AM

    What a poem. What a fate.

  1. Date: 12/7/2012 4:32:00 PM

    OMG ..YOU are blooming..this is fantastic! [a kryielle is kinda supposed to be like aprayer BUT oh well..who cares when you made ART!!] Great job and I hear you too who can think of Jersey without the mob? Light & Love Cher

  1. Date: 12/7/2012 9:07:00 AM

    This has got my curosity up? Now what is that IT?...Enjoyed reading this one..Great work..Yes, we have been on soup quite awhile now..Thanks for the kind review of my work..I appreciate you stopping by...Sara

  1. Date: 12/7/2012 8:35:00 AM

    Hi Tim,,, this is awesome,,, luv your nice write..congratulation for your contest and thank you so much for your stopping by appreciate it much <3<3<3 SK

  1. Date: 12/6/2012 7:16:00 PM

    wonderful poem! this evokes such a melancholy mood in a very brilliant way. best of luck in the contest...