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My Reply to you Is This


How dare you creep about each day and night
And prey upon the weak to give them fright
Your grip so firm, clinging to the breast
It’s time you took your leave to give them rest
While having strength to pray to up above
Your evil cannot cloak or feign true love
Your tasteless mischief gives you pure delight
Yet still in sleep her soul will wake and fight
Your smile belies you stealing like a thief
Corrupting souls who spend their time in grief
Your tasteless life denies you any pride
Be off with you while I cajole my bride

© 28/8/2012

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  1. Date: 2/18/2013 11:37:00 AM

    Ok, I guess I'm way off base after reading many of the other comments, but I thought this was a bit of dark humor about a succling baby and the time it takes from you and your bride....of course, I'm not the sharpest tool in the shed.

  1. Date: 12/17/2012 9:15:00 PM

    you are the poet of every season....great write David !

  1. Date: 12/4/2012 7:17:00 AM

    Very powerful and passionate poem. Loved always, bl

  1. Date: 11/30/2012 9:34:00 PM

    Bro, a compelling and passionate write, I want you in my corner always! Hugs

  1. Date: 11/30/2012 5:39:00 AM

    Oh David this is such a great poem. So much weight in each and every word. Hugs - shaz x

  1. Date: 11/29/2012 7:00:00 PM

    Very powerful write here David,flows so well..

  1. Date: 11/29/2012 6:18:00 AM

    powerful poem here, David, really like this....

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 3:02:00 PM

    David, is this an extended metaphor? I once wrote something similar to this but of course the topic was not as serious. Good and heartfelt.

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 1:59:00 PM

    give it to em Dave ol mate, and toss em clear over the gate, :)

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 6:27:00 AM

    COOL PATTERN NICE SUBJECT TOO THANKS FOR YOUR COMMENTS ON MINE DAVIDSCOTT

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 4:20:00 AM

    big up David! awesome!

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 2:39:00 AM

    Creative write-up there David, well done. Hope to read more.

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 2:19:00 AM

    Lovely one David, to keep fighting is tiring i know, but look for the light at the end of the tunnel....Seren

  1. Date: 11/27/2012 3:41:00 PM

    Wow there is a lot going on here. Messages beneath messages. Well done.

  1. Date: 11/27/2012 2:16:00 PM

    powerful and heartfelt write, my friend. Hope you are both doing well : )

  1. Date: 11/27/2012 11:39:00 AM

    I love this poem! Very creative indeed! Oh, and in response to your comment, yes, I actually am only 12. I write mainly humorous, rhyming poetry, but sometimes I'll be sorrow when I'm gloomy. And I may only be 12, but I'm very mature and responsible.

  1. Date: 11/27/2012 11:28:00 AM

    David, sometimes the head on approach works perfectly. Making him aware of you knowing about his games and telling him you are ready for it. A powerful write my friend. Was good to come across you today. Hope your week will be a blessed one ;)

  1. Date: 11/27/2012 11:01:00 AM

    What a powerful and intriguing write my friend! You have masterfully projected pain and it is quite painful indeed! I hope all is going better with your wife David, but i know you are struggling, you are in my prayers! What a significant piece, Great Work!!

  1. Date: 11/27/2012 10:24:00 AM

    Hi David another great write love it my friend hope you are ok, all the best Owen

  1. Date: 11/27/2012 9:22:00 AM

    Having traveled on your poetic flight, I'm delighted. Nice one David!

  1. Date: 11/27/2012 7:26:00 AM

    Wonderfully rhyming , deep work, enjoyed, David!! Jag

  1. Date: 11/27/2012 6:50:00 AM

    interesting David, your writers block diminishing all the while xx

    Tams The Golden Girl Avatar Mandy Tams The Golden Girl Date: 11/27/2012 6:51:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    oops may be wrong there just seen the date on this one sorry xx
  1. Date: 11/27/2012 6:40:00 AM

    Interesting work..It has great rhyme, rythm, and flow to it..I like the couplet poetry..Enjoyed reading this morn..Thanks for stopping by..Soup mail..Sara