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  1. Date: 12/4/2012 7:13:00 AM
    The last line is tremendously true. Loved always, bl

  1. Date: 11/28/2012 2:21:00 AM
    Haha I was reading it so fast, had to go back and really read the words. Well done...Seren

  1. Date: 11/27/2012 3:46:00 AM
    Feel the beat here David I see you oomph is coming back to you xx

  1. Date: 11/26/2012 7:36:00 PM
    ha this,, jumping,,, jumping,, i can not see you reciting this poem,,, love the way you hung the words during the rap... always~ TEX

  1. Date: 11/26/2012 5:57:00 PM
    wow, I really enjoyed this rap poem, new experience on me by reading those :D, thank you David for your time to visit on my page, it's a pleasure :D

  1. Date: 11/26/2012 5:07:00 PM
    Enjoyed reading this one, lively and so full of punch, David!! Jag

  1. Date: 11/26/2012 4:30:00 PM
    Hey hey David, today I took the time to read your poem, I liked it! hug from me Laila

  1. Date: 11/26/2012 2:55:00 PM
    Lovin' it! Oh, and btw thanks for the comment on my poem as a matter of fact I'm only twelve years old.

  1. Date: 11/26/2012 2:37:00 PM
    hahaha, love the wit of that last line: just hung in the air where they belong! sounds like you had great fun with this one, David. Hope all is well where you are!!

  1. Date: 11/26/2012 2:18:00 PM
    Very good use of extensive vocabulary.

  1. Date: 11/26/2012 1:29:00 PM
    Youtuba love it mate get on youtube and relate, johnson did an he's no kid, just the one to esasperate? me youtube on johnsondon2 you'l find, (250 of) if the Lord don't really mind, listen and suffer up your fate, shut up johnson don't rewind.. oops too late! re Slam Dunk by Dave Williams Don Johnson

  1. Date: 11/26/2012 1:10:00 PM
    Feeling the beat !! Poetrysoup needs an audio so poets can do an audible read. I can just about hear this read out loud !! Enjoyed my friend !!

  1. Date: 11/26/2012 10:18:00 AM
    Hi David you are back with a bang my friend, great write as always, hope you and your good lady are ok, all the best Owen

  1. Date: 11/26/2012 8:47:00 AM
    but appropriate words, indeed!

  1. Date: 11/26/2012 8:17:00 AM
    Hey David this, is brilliant, the flow is awesome, i could almost rap this, if i was a bit younger of course...