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  1. Date: 7/31/2014 10:29:00 AM
    I find this rich in description and metaphor, but ponderous in content. I think for a poem that is so faithful to rhyme (which of course is OK) it is too drawn-out, too labored in detail. Rhyme needs to enhance a work, not to be employed as artifice. Now, what do you think?

    Ludden Avatar Robert Ludden
    Date: 8/1/2014 10:53:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Oink...From this mud in which I wallow, a comment such as yours does hurt. Perhaps I misjudged the piece. I'm not a master critic nor a master poet. I have credits by some as a fairly educated reader, but by no means an expert. I do know that writers of masterpieces usually do not trumpet that assessment themselves.
  1. Date: 6/21/2013 4:32:00 PM
    A dark truth rising. Powerful images of a mean season .Reminds me of the hollow people in my own life. Rock On

  1. Date: 11/21/2012 10:20:00 AM
    A dark scene well and vividly desribed here. Peace & Love Matthew Anish