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A Way too Long Intro: the ORIGINS of the Savages - not McRac's fault

On the third day of when in the land of the Frostic life was tough and unusually caustic. Hope was diminished, it fell out of style, politeness was finished and no one would smile. The Greeder now ruled and ate with a whim whatever he wanted and he was not getting slim. Unlike the people, pinched by the freeze (on everything cheerful - they called it the Greeze). You know - like Greeder and freeze all mashed together? Greeze rolled off the tongue like inclement weather. Which was not that uncommon, since he’d swallowed the sun. In fact, he ate ALL the good things, related to fun. But deep in the shadows of everyday places lived a small band of outcasts with cute smiling faces. They were the Savages, just ignorant hicks, prone to outbursts of laughter and the pulling of tricks. They were quite happy, in spite of the freeze, but the regular folks groaned in the grip of the Greeze. They were unschooled pranksters, but terribly shy, and like faeries and elves they were not prone to sigh. They all played charades and marched in parades and were quite widely known for their brave escapades. The Greed told the Savages, “GET OUT! Leave my scene!” So they flew off to search for the Queen. Who’d been banished, of course, when the Greed came to power. On the third day of when, it was a very dark hour. *to be continued...why, I don't know. What else is a fella to do on a cold rainy day? With no where to be and now where to go?

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  1. Date: 11/26/2012 10:42:00 PM

    Intrigued still !!!! I like your rhymes and the story line is fun to follow. Enjoyed !! I too am a bit reminded of the "Grinch" and "Whoville"....but I do like your savage tale !!

  1. Date: 11/26/2012 6:25:00 AM

    Sounds like a disaster in Grinch land John; makes me want to peek in and see how it all ends. We won't need a happy ending for this one! Something to wake me up this AM and get me going! :)

  1. Date: 11/25/2012 8:10:00 AM

    I'm off to root for the SAvages.

  1. Date: 11/21/2012 11:56:00 AM

    More... MORE... MORE...We want MORE! Oh OH! Can't help myself again... You do that to me... In stories I think I've hit the mother lode here!... Will be awaiting the next part... Love the 'to be continued' part... Fun read...PS. Did you notice I liked it?

  1. Date: 11/21/2012 10:49:00 AM

    this is so good John, a awesome tale to follow on, great look forward to that...

  1. Date: 11/20/2012 7:55:00 PM

    Alright! You must continue! Ya brought me a smile.:o)

  1. Date: 11/18/2012 4:58:00 PM

    i'm intrigued. i love the rhyme and flow of this - a cross between dr. seuss and tolkien. write some more!

  1. Date: 11/18/2012 3:06:00 PM

    Your imagination is awesome. Love those stories. Keep them coming, especially to continue on this one. Had to laugh at you. Love ya, Toquyen