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  1. Date: 8/13/2013 6:34:00 PM
    As for input regarding this haiku, I agree with your author's notes concerning giving away too much in the 3rd version, even though poetically, "Star of David" can work very well with a form other than haiku. Initially, I leaned on using the opening line of the 2nd version, but I think that since you have "gaseous" in the second line, and then of course, "Nazis" in the third line, simply opening with "one star" really lends to having that "aha!" moment by initially not giving too much away.

  1. Date: 8/13/2013 6:28:00 PM
    I fully realize how subjective individual taste is. If I was running your current Frida Kahlo contest, I just read the 1st place winner. Yup, my mind would be made up already, no matter wot else was submitted from now on in(unless a piece somehow(somehow?)managed to highlight the visceral, fighting nature of Frida Kahlo's paintings(and of herself)in even an even better manner).

  1. Date: 12/8/2012 10:38:00 AM
    I love your last version best..cause the yellow star gives an indication of what you re referring too dear..A brave person it had to escape..I love this haiku..It reminds me of my visit to Auschwitz as a touridt..i dont want to ever visit again...The eerie aura i felt still.hsunts me.

    Chircop  Avatar Charmaine Chircop
    Date: 12/8/2012 10:39:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I meant haunt
  1. Date: 11/18/2012 2:46:00 PM
    Cyndi - found this while trolling the Haiku archives - just wondering - did you rewrite it in another form? If so, what is the title? I didn't find it in your stuff. I've absolutely no clue how you'd write this, but the topic is very intriguing. I made the Star/Nazi connection easily in the first version. I thought it signified the end of the holocaust (the Jews survived) and the Nazis left (by defeat).

  1. Date: 11/14/2012 6:17:00 PM
    you've really got some serious imagery here, but I don't know whom or what the one star is. Yes! I did terrible in history classes. hugs, Catie :)

    MacMillan Avatar Cyndi MacMillan
    Date: 11/14/2012 7:02:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    the word gaseous was very intentional. Gas chambers. Some children did manage to escape detection.
    MacMillan Avatar Cyndi MacMillan
    Date: 11/14/2012 6:50:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    In my mind I see two things which I'm trying to convey. One that it is a cloudy night, but that one star avoids being covered by horrid cloud. The other is that while this is happening a Jewish person (as was required) manages to hide from Naxis during the a check of a house where she is hiding.
    MacMillan Avatar Cyndi MacMillan
    Date: 11/14/2012 6:50:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    THe Jewish were required to wear a yellow star of David in 1938, just before the holocaust began. They were only allowed to shop/travel/eat at places that allowed the badge. I added a picture in the about link