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Below is the poem entitled Heart which was written by poet Ira Dawson. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

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Heart

She hallowed out her heart again,
She tore out all the black.
Then scraped the walls with her bare hands,
Until she reached the back.
She washed off all the rusted screws,
And broken veins, and pounding wounds.
She tried to make sense of this scene,
But honestly, she could not think.
She knew she had to start fresh,
But in her chest was left a mess.
But in her hands was left the flesh,
Of memories and secrets kept.

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  1. Date: 11/15/2012 9:29:00 PM

    This is very well written Ira! The angst portrayed by the woman is real. Nice work!

  1. Date: 11/14/2012 7:58:00 PM

    I'm adding this poem to my list of favorite poems!

    Dawson Avatar Ira Dawson Date: 11/14/2012 8:44:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you so much for taking the time to read my stuff and for your kind words. I really appreciate it, Anne. :)
  1. Date: 11/14/2012 3:12:00 PM

    I really like this how raw, the sights you show the emotion, I would suggest playing a bit more with the end rhyme [fresh/mess] it does 'feel' right? [she knew she ahd to adress/the gaping hole left in her chest] There are alot of good choices for the same end rhyme. Light & Love

    Dawson Avatar Ira Dawson Date: 11/14/2012 5:21:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I greatly appreciate your feedback, Debbie. I honestly like your suggest and I feel that you are right, there should be a tighter couplet there. :)