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Wishing

You move a lot some nights

 As I lay next to you, I watched your face

 Your eyelashes fluttered

 I feared you would awake and catch me

 You raised one arm and sighed

 Then you smiled

 Were you dreaming of me?

 I hope so

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  1. Date: 11/11/2012 3:04:00 PM

    This is a great guessing game. I guess you are talking about sleeping next to a golden haired retreiver. Or maybe a dragon or even a gold fish in a bowl. Either way it fails as verse.

    Pavlick Avatar Kieran Pavlick Date: 11/22/2012 10:51:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I am sorry you feel that way. I shall endeavor to do better next time. I was trying to convey a feeling of marriage or relationship that one participant was unsure of it continuing.