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HANDS THAT DIPPED ME

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HANDS THAT DIPPED ME



From your hands that dipped me in cool tubs and soft morn wakes, you were the gentle lion taming my bohemian strains; the lamb of summer rain catching me like a feather on your palm... always, your balm poured moon glow of bliss, erring only when my restless flowers needed to bend: from where pictures stood, time bowed shaping night talks, life’s edges, and paused faces. Then the gas light dripped on lacquered frames, silhouettes fading as I collected our thoughts— marbles in my pocket—to keep me safe from cold winds, rough dreams. And tonight, my breath grows wild, noting the fabric of tears as I click past lenses : shut off, shut off. Just when evening’s done, you reach your arms in slow motion to hold me close again...hands that dipped me then, gone, without saying goodbye from a wave of coma that folded your eyes. Among old photographs, I still ask this... Daddy, need we part too soon? I was only 24. Loss Contest of Craig Cornish 5 Nov 2012

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  1. Date: 4/2/2013 9:54:00 AM

    Wow, Nette...this took me...

  1. Date: 1/20/2013 3:23:00 PM

    Congratulations on winning with this Nette, yet sorry to hear of this sad event at 24years old hope you are well, Joe.

  1. Date: 11/10/2012 6:09:00 PM

    Hi Nette, once again, enjoyed seeing you on Craig's winning list.. always~ pd

  1. Date: 11/9/2012 8:11:00 PM

    This poem brought me to tears.....the last line of the 2nd stanza....oh wow.

  1. Date: 11/8/2012 7:54:00 PM

    CONGRATS NETTE LUV ON AN EXCELLENT WRITE AS ALWAYS AND WORTHY WIN .. WE LOST POWER FOR 2 DAYS FROM SNOWSTORM AND STILL MANY PROBLEMS COMMENTING TO POETS ON PS BY ME .. SENT TPS A BARRAGE OF SM'S TO NO AVAIL .. STILL A MESS ..OH

  1. Date: 11/8/2012 4:45:00 PM

    Nette, congratulations on your superb win in Craig's contest. Love, Gail

  1. Date: 11/8/2012 3:01:00 PM

    Congratulations on your winning poem in the "Loss" contest - / / Anne-Lise :)

  1. Date: 11/8/2012 2:19:00 PM

    Marvelously tender write. Congrad's on Your Win! Light & Love

  1. Date: 11/8/2012 2:13:00 PM

    Nette, as always your words are a painting of emotions and this is no exception.

  1. Date: 11/8/2012 10:32:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win in Craig's "Loss" contest Nette. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 11/8/2012 9:26:00 AM

    I got shivers while reading this poem. It is just heart-wrenching. Congratulations on your well-deserved win!

  1. Date: 11/8/2012 9:00:00 AM

    Excellent presentation of past days in to the present feelings with few words in such a way that every lovely old one is tied there in. Good luck always, bl

  1. Date: 11/8/2012 1:12:00 AM

    Nette...this one pierced my heart. Right from the title, the tender images of a connection forged in love, and the heartbreaking loss - all very well put across. Just outstanding!

  1. Date: 11/6/2012 2:53:00 PM

    so sad, Nette, and beautifully portrayed, this time of sorrow. I love how you described things in that last stanza. wonderful!

  1. Date: 11/6/2012 1:26:00 PM

    a very sad poem this is. I just love how you embellish reality and bring it to life. Wonderful poem. Best wishes in the contest. hugs, catie :)

  1. Date: 11/6/2012 11:05:00 AM

    Very touching my dearest Nette! I was 18 when my dad passed away so I certainly can relate! Hugs and much love, Jack xox

  1. Date: 11/6/2012 7:09:00 AM

    A very sad but yet beautiful write Nette as it comes straight from your heart. Love and big hugs , Carol (XXXX)

  1. Date: 11/6/2012 6:24:00 AM

    Wow, very touching and moving Poem. Thanks for sharing a part of this special relationship. I am sorry you lost him so early.

  1. Date: 11/6/2012 5:34:00 AM

    Great work honoring your father whom this expressive work shows you loved dearly..Enjoyed reading this contest entry..Winner in my book..Thanks for stopping by...I appreciate the time spent at my work..Sara

  1. Date: 11/6/2012 2:57:00 AM

    soft, subtle yet so heartbreaking. An outstanding write Nette filled with such lovely emotions. Excellent use of vocabulary makes your work a winning entry.

  1. Date: 11/6/2012 1:17:00 AM

    Ow geeeeeeee.this gem misted my eyes.. Heartwrenching poem..it hurts to hear of loss of those we love..Charma

  1. Date: 11/5/2012 6:10:00 PM

    Just through your spirit, he didn't leave his job undone; He Loved! You know your Angel by name! Touching Write......Halloween was a walk down Hollywood Boulevard for the excitement.

  1. Date: 11/5/2012 3:42:00 PM

    What an ingrained feel you have brought to me with this powerfully enlightening write! You have brought tears to my eyes with this tearful poem that you have so illustriously written my good friend! I cry for your pain, I don't know what it's like to lose a parent yet so I don't know your incredible pain that you went through, but I do empathize with you Nette! What an awesome, tremendous piece, Great Work!!

  1. Date: 11/5/2012 3:18:00 PM

    So sad Nette ..... sad .... I go to my bed with tears on my cheeks. - Good Night, my friend. - See you tomorrow. - - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)