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An Emptiness Within




Raindrops
     outside my
            closed  fists,
     an          emptiness
          within.




© kash poet
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Placement:1st; (November  2012)

Contest:Gogyoka

Sponsor: Joann Grisetti


##Gogyoka, is a form of Japanese poetry pioneered by Enta Kusakabe in 1957 in his quest to find freedom from the constraints of tanka poetry. Unlike tanka, gogyoka does not have any syllable requirement for the length of its lines. The only hardfast rule of gogyoka is that the poem should be five lines long, with line breaks occurring as a result of natural breath-pattern, which is individual to a particular speaker and their language.


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  1. Date: 11/10/2012 5:51:00 PM

    Kash, :-) CONGRATULATIONS!!! Enjoyed reading the poem you entered in Joann's "Gogyoka" contest. Always & Forever * PD

  1. Date: 11/9/2012 1:58:00 AM

    Congratulations on your well deserved win Kash xx

  1. Date: 11/8/2012 9:00:00 PM

    wOW. That was great. Amazing visuals here and internal impact. These are the kind of poems I love. Thanks for sharing. Always, Laura

  1. Date: 11/8/2012 3:15:00 PM

    Well said Kash, Congrats on your well deserved first in Joann’s contest!

  1. Date: 11/8/2012 10:53:00 AM

    Congratulations on your super win in Joann's "Gogyoka" contest Kash. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 11/8/2012 6:17:00 AM

    Congrats, Kash. I very much like yours and Harry's!! Jag

  1. Date: 11/8/2012 4:51:00 AM

    Congrats Kash, on your top win with this beauty!

  1. Date: 11/7/2012 9:50:00 PM

    This is beautiful. Many congrats for this win Kash.

  1. Date: 11/7/2012 5:21:00 PM

    congratulations. sand, but touching.

  1. Date: 11/7/2012 4:13:00 PM

    MOST deserved win, kash. Congratulations.

  1. Date: 11/2/2012 1:43:00 PM

    A tear escapes my heart! Simply beautiful My friend! Cynthia

  1. Date: 11/2/2012 10:33:00 AM

    you are a wise man Kash, this is an amazing statement within your poem...

  1. Date: 10/31/2012 12:06:00 PM

    SO DRAMATIC .. SO EMPHATIC KASH ..A STUNNER .. A DIRECT IMPACT ON EMOTIONS LUV .. GOOD LUCK ..

  1. Date: 10/30/2012 6:35:00 PM

    Original...nice

  1. Date: 10/29/2012 3:29:00 PM

    hurry and try a sijo, kash!! not sure I did mine right, but oh well.

  1. Date: 10/29/2012 2:28:00 PM

    It would be kind of dry in there..Enjoyed reading your creative work..Thanks for stoppign by my blog..I let Jack know that you stopped by with comments..Sara

  1. Date: 10/28/2012 10:08:00 PM

    wake up kashi, lol... for something new in your sleeves?.. :) huggs!

  1. Date: 10/28/2012 6:25:00 PM

    If you always hide from the reality of who and what you are there will always be ..AN emptiness within..marvelous man why hide? Light & Love

  1. Date: 10/28/2012 8:55:00 AM

    by the way, I love the way you created the empty space in that line four!

  1. Date: 10/27/2012 2:26:00 PM

    Ahhhhhh I like this Kash.. and yes the Tanka King indeed.... Michael

  1. Date: 10/27/2012 12:47:00 PM

    Excellent Tanka penned here. So agree with Nette's comment below, much suspense in such few words.

  1. Date: 10/27/2012 11:46:00 AM

    * SOUNDS KIND OF GLOOMY KASHIE ? I HOPE THAT TODAY IS A BRIGHTER DAY FOR YOUR PRECIOUS HEART AND THANK YOU FOR YOUR KIND VISIT. WARM REGARDS, RACHEL *

  1. Date: 10/27/2012 10:20:00 AM

    wow, Kash, you really capture the essence of this form. you are a tanka king!! Love it.

  1. Date: 10/27/2012 12:48:00 AM

    ahhh, kashi... love the contrast approach here...you stir the concept, and lead the mind down the twists and turns... oh yeah, yeah!.. winning huggs!

  1. Date: 10/26/2012 7:46:00 PM

    Kash, a wonderful and deep tanka..., thank you for sharing your wonderful poem, Good night*PD

  1. Date: 10/26/2012 4:09:00 PM

    Very nice, intricate! Terry

  1. Date: 10/26/2012 1:36:00 PM

    You've caused a bewilderment within me my friend! This is a totally awesome write Kashi! I really enjoyed reading this incredibly delightful poem this afternoon! Quite the special piece, Great Work!!

  1. Date: 10/26/2012 1:03:00 PM

    You have a knack for a big surprise in a small package...Crafty writer!

  1. Date: 10/26/2012 12:35:00 PM

    Just beautiful Kash. You never cease to amaze me. Hugs, Gail

  1. Date: 10/26/2012 12:26:00 PM

    Awesome write, Kash!