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Unzipped

The pocketbook Thrown upon The car seat Hangs precariously Unzipped
First attempt at Gogyohka Haven't a clue if correct

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  1. Date: 10/24/2012 3:11:00 PM

    This is the sort of a write; that gets you on the edge of your seat, a good one in my Book Sara..!

  1. Date: 10/24/2012 11:15:00 AM

    Precariously unzipped! Sara!

  1. Date: 10/24/2012 7:13:00 AM

    Nice one really, like it !! Jag

  1. Date: 10/24/2012 7:02:00 AM

    very clever and nicely laid out.. have a great day cory

  1. Date: 10/23/2012 7:36:00 PM

    Just hope no robber sees this unzipped pocketbook! This is a wonderful write my friend! I twist of humor with it as well I see! I really enjoyed this delightful and pleasant piece, Great Work!!

  1. Date: 10/23/2012 5:17:00 PM

    Don't know how many cards I've lost like that [wince] under the seat or mat they go..into the abyss of darkness never to be seen again! Light & Love

  1. Date: 10/23/2012 4:54:00 PM

    * Wow, Your Beauty, Had Me At 'Unzipped,' LOL. After Reading This Beautiful Short Verse Thrice Times, Sweet Beautiful Sara, Twas As A Slow Motions Movie Show And, Spellbound Inside 'The Beauty.' Soda Pops And Popcorn Scattered About; Perfumes, Misty Glass. 'Beautiful Sara.' Sweet Kisses To You, Dipped In Love, Rachel *

  1. Date: 10/23/2012 2:07:00 PM

    AN INTENSE VISUAL SARA ..ONE CAN SEE AS READING IF TO SMILE OR FRET OVER LOST CONTENTS .. GOOD IDEA ANS BEST WISHES LUV ..

  1. Date: 10/23/2012 2:06:00 PM

    AN INTENSE VISUAL SARA ..ONE CAN SEE AS READING IF TO SMILE OR FRET OVER LOST CONTENTS .. GOOD IDEA ANS BEST WISHES LUV ..

  1. Date: 10/23/2012 1:42:00 PM

    I like it and hopefully it's the kind of lines she meant us to do!!

  1. Date: 10/23/2012 1:32:00 PM

    I enjoyed reading your poetry today Sara. I need to try this form. The best to you in the contest. Love, Carol