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  1. Date: 2/23/2013 10:16:00 AM
    I really like the sparseness in this piece. It has the opposite effect of smallness; rather, it creates enormity.

  1. Date: 11/5/2012 8:35:00 AM
    a little bitty tear drop onto my keyboard falls. lovely writing.

  1. Date: 10/21/2012 11:36:00 AM
    oops, it was Joann's contest I meant.

  1. Date: 10/21/2012 11:27:00 AM
    wow, this is really good too, Chris. I love the nostalgia of this one. Keep writing tankas!! this one cold very well qualify in that latest tanka contest with a funny name starting with a G. I think it is Suzette's contest. wish you would have done me a clerihew. I know you would have done a really funny one.

  1. Date: 10/18/2012 6:14:00 PM
    high school photo's/ sit on the oak buffet/ no dishes in the sink/ mother snores in the lounge/ empty tea cup...smooch! Light & Love

    Aechtner Avatar Chris D. Aechtner
    Date: 10/21/2012 11:51:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Doobie, your tanka here is more 'interesting'. I only offer one main objective detail to the scene. Yeah, I like your example. Since you put it up here, I'd have to say that for my personal tastes, it is almost too objective, and there are too many details, with too many 'cuts'. But hey, each to their own, right? I still think it is a good tanka. And only an ignorant idiot would proclaim there to be one way to write tanka....
    Situation Avatar The Situation
    Date: 10/20/2012 5:03:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Now this is much better and I'm sure that this is more like what a tanka should be. Understandable with a clear vision of what the poet see's.
  1. Date: 10/18/2012 4:41:00 PM
    Hey, Chris, I like this--you're always outside the box and worthwhile reading!!

  1. Date: 10/18/2012 2:15:00 PM
    I like this one! And the specific mention of what's on tele brings out the theme profoundly. Nice!

  1. Date: 10/18/2012 11:53:00 AM
    Soup Mail!

  1. Date: 10/18/2012 10:51:00 AM
    You're only posting "medium-strength" tanka? : ) Leaving the best for later? Dont be shy! Post them! Tanka! Tanka! Tanka! : ) A melancholic (I would even say desolate...devastated) feeling in this hight-strenght tanka. I can relate to it (mine is 20!). Why four in the first line? Would you like to add "as"? : ) Just an idea.

  1. Date: 10/18/2012 9:30:00 AM
    Aye...felt this strongly...I have an empty nest sometimes...fantastic tanka in my opinion.

  1. Date: 10/18/2012 9:29:00 AM
    Fine effort, Chris. I like the irresistible speculation your last line promotes. As to the girl with the wine glass - no, not Vermeer. I was scanning American Art Review and glanced at the painting. The artist has done wonders with the girl's eyes and bodily position. Am I a thief? You betcha. Couldn't resist. Love, daver

  1. Date: 10/18/2012 6:01:00 AM
    Interesting one..We have got an empty nest for the first time in 48 years..There has always been a child, adult child or grandchild here until now..Thanks for stopping by my blog..I will let Jack know of the ones who have commented..Sara

  1. Date: 10/17/2012 6:09:00 PM
    I like this a lot Chris. You captured a cool theme into a nicely written form. MJF