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Rejection

Your glass house shatters, Your boats caught fire, Your cards got defeated, Your gates are closed Your dreams are broken your bridges burned your body frozen your joys have ended Your smile is lost your world tore down your breath is lifeless your heart is holed your love is gone your eyes are blind your room is dark your music is gloomy your sky is raining your soul is empty your ego is blaming You say you don't want me You don't know this hurt Choose your words before because i may not be able to take it any more.

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  1. Date: 11/25/2012 9:47:00 AM

    I am glad that you can express your hurt so effectively. That is a good thing. It is so true that all the senses are affected by this. "Your music is gloomy" can be a mood or your perception. Either way--this expression is intense. It should be required reading for the callus, but then--they probably would't understand. No empathy.

  1. Date: 10/30/2012 2:27:00 PM

    Where there is pain, you find stregnth. Writting has been a great way for me to express my pain. You are a wonderful writer. I enjoy reading your work.

  1. Date: 10/17/2012 12:52:00 AM

    Pain makes us stronger buit their is a limit to everyones ability to carry burden.This is so painful like a cry in the night to a mirror that wont speak back.I like this

    Jefferson Avatar Sha'ntez Jefferson Date: 10/17/2012 1:03:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Wow I can really see you there sorry you have to go through this but everything is a learning experience just dont let the lesson overwhelm you to the point where you have no more to give to yourself.A womans worth has no meaure or depth/ love yourself dont let anyone love you to death
    abdali Avatar mary abdali Date: 10/17/2012 12:57:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    it is a cry in the mirror.