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The Evening Could Not Be Better

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Below is the poem entitled The Evening Could Not Be Better which was written by poet Laura Breidenthal. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

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The Evening Could Not Be Better

I fork my medium rare steak
And put it into my mouth
Everything is settled and nice
The evening could not be better
My husband insists I say the prayer
After all, he hasn’t the tongue to speak
I whisper, “God was never there”
And I listen for the slightest shriek
But like God, they are all silent
In unison of emptiness
The little ones eat so little these days, dear
With their silly ipods and cellphones
Daddy will agree in drones
They’re useless little pigs…
All of my children are so quiet
So well behaved—SILENT
 
You are so well behaved tonight…
I eat them all raw and stare
Daddy always wanted me to say the prayer
But without you…without you there
The evening could not be better
You useless Pig…

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  1. Date: 10/19/2012 7:40:00 AM

    powerful is this, Laura, love the twist, awesome....

  1. Date: 10/18/2012 9:55:00 PM

    Wow, very thought provoking and full of dark imagery. I enjoyed reading a lot. Great write.

  1. Date: 10/18/2012 2:25:00 PM

    Great stuff...there's angst in this poem which I dig a lot. A poem very much likable & favable. <--- is that even a word?!?!?!

    Breidenthal Avatar Laura Breidenthal
    Date: 10/18/2012 4:53:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Now it is, Jonas. ;) Thanks--glad yah liked it!
  1. Date: 10/17/2012 9:00:00 PM

    Sincere, honest, touching and beautiful.

    Breidenthal Avatar Laura Breidenthal
    Date: 10/18/2012 4:53:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks! :D
  1. Date: 10/17/2012 7:19:00 PM

    wow....this one paints a vivid picture, good poem, i enjoyed reading this one!

    Breidenthal Avatar Laura Breidenthal
    Date: 10/18/2012 4:54:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    So glad you enjoyed! Love your stuff by the way...
  1. Date: 10/17/2012 9:56:00 AM

    It took me a while to really understand what was going on here, but now that I get it, I really like it! a twisted poem :)

    Breidenthal Avatar Laura Breidenthal
    Date: 10/18/2012 4:54:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    It's kinda one of those things where yah get it...but you're not entirely sure. Glad you figured it out! ^^