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Autumn gold

Autumn gold 

on TV - the weather – guy 
predicted enthusiastically

a lot of sun and a blue sky
beautiful warm late summer days 
during the upcoming autumn break

he did not know
for sure
he did not lie
probably

the ticking on the window
sings a different song
the clouds are sharing 
nothing but rain

I have to go out
before the rain stops
into that wet world
into the cold

would it help
if I remembered
would it be different 
if I could touch
the autumn leaves
made of sunny  gold 

©Ellie Daphne van Stralen 2011-12

"Just" complaining about the weather..... or??????????

Third prize winner @ Poetrysoup-conest Üp in the Air" November 2012. 

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  1. Date: 11/17/2012 8:34:00 AM

    Nice touch; it seems so alive. I can almost feel the rain because it is cloudy outside. Thanks for the visit.

  1. Date: 11/6/2012 2:54:00 PM

    Creative approach to the contest..Enjoyed reading..Congrats on your win..Sara

    Daphne Avatar Ellie Daphne Date: 11/7/2012 1:53:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Ty for your comment with content Ellie Daphne
  1. Date: 11/5/2012 6:11:00 PM

    congrats on your special win, sear dahpne..:) huggs

    Daphne Avatar Ellie Daphne Date: 11/7/2012 1:52:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    :-) Yes, it is very special to me. TY Ellie Daphne
  1. Date: 11/5/2012 7:45:00 AM

    congratulations on your win Ellie :) cheers!!

    Daphne Avatar Ellie Daphne Date: 11/5/2012 8:15:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Ty for taking the time to send your congrats. Very appreciated! Greetings from Nl. Ellie daphne
  1. Date: 11/5/2012 7:32:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win in Russell's "Up In The Autumn Air" contest Ellie. Love, Carol

    Daphne Avatar Ellie Daphne Date: 11/5/2012 8:16:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you for taking the time to send me your congrats...... Very appreciated!!!!!! Greetings from the Netherlands. Ellie daphne
  1. Date: 11/4/2012 3:47:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win Elle xx

    Daphne Avatar Ellie Daphne Date: 11/4/2012 8:35:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    It is my first win ever........ so I am a happy ´bronze´ girl TY TY
  1. Date: 11/3/2012 9:53:00 PM

    I like the cute way you did your Up in the Air poem. Congrats on the win.

    Daphne Avatar Ellie Daphne Date: 11/4/2012 1:25:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Ty for your 'sweet' comment. Greetings from Netherlands. Ellie Daphne.
  1. Date: 11/3/2012 7:43:00 PM

    We had an unusually warm dry summer for our rainy country. The rain is welcome but congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

    Daphne Avatar Ellie Daphne Date: 11/4/2012 1:26:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Wishing you the rain that was too much over here........ :-) TY and greetings from the Netherlands. Ellie Daphne
  1. Date: 10/23/2012 1:27:00 AM

    Evocative and profound. Bravo, Ellie

  1. Date: 10/16/2012 8:53:00 AM

    What a polite way of commenting on the often inaccurate predictions of the weatherman! I enjoyed it.

    Daphne Avatar Ellie Daphne Date: 10/16/2012 9:00:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    You got it...... and so useful to have it 'at hand' :-) TY so much, Greetings from the Netherlands.
  1. Date: 10/16/2012 7:47:00 AM

    I love the images in this poem...I visualized eevery thing you said! keeep it up! Omneya

    Daphne Avatar Ellie Daphne Date: 10/16/2012 7:57:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Then it must be raining where you are.... and the weather forecast good. TY so much!