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WHERE,WHEN,HOW,WHY,WHAT




Before lamplight’s panels close the day, I sneak into this sacramental hallway fueling my pagan howls where I can be the raw-weed part of me: a time when lines are strewn on the floor--- spilling the bones of my own fonts, scratched and bent. Here, the ink bleeds of how i watched the pellet sun grate dusky leaves among stones, or why old man Charlie picked his a regular bench on the park, talking to himself motionless as if a 40s band were playing in his head. More hooves stampede as the gas light blinks with the harlequin moon, touching my solar plexus, my zodiac beginnings: still, the blots cough more profane curses and blessed litanies of haunting notes releasing a full- blown scream. Somehow, morphine hours wear off from a trance…I walk in limbo upon wings of paper trails flooded with drunken ABCs , outpouring secrecy of thoughts. My mind locks the speech of breath's eyes in a final hymn: the drama and comedy of one day make me a student aging anniversaries: my bile hurts no more... The spine of pen and words collapse as my fingers open new stars waxing new gloss. Joann Grisetti’s Contest: Drunken Pen 2 by nette onclaud

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  1. Date: 10/25/2012 10:20:00 AM

    It's full of vision, lovely done, my sweet friend. Congrats you lately, sorry. Loved your golden pen. You are always genius. Thanks for your comment. Loved always, bl

  1. Date: 10/23/2012 5:17:00 PM

    Congrats on your amazing win..Sara

  1. Date: 10/20/2012 12:05:00 PM

    Congrats Nette...a fine win indeed! One love, Joy wells

  1. Date: 10/19/2012 9:21:00 PM

    Nette, congratulations with your awesome win in the "Drunken Pen Round 2 " contest.....love the way you hold your pen. good night :-) xox PD

  1. Date: 10/19/2012 4:58:00 AM

    Congrats on your win!

  1. Date: 10/19/2012 4:50:00 AM

    Congrats on your win!

  1. Date: 10/19/2012 4:43:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win in Joann's "Drunken Pen" contest Nette. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 10/19/2012 3:25:00 AM

    congratulations on your win Nette...your poem is so awesome...cheers!!

  1. Date: 10/18/2012 3:32:00 PM

    Now where to start on all my LIKES [sacramental hallway][the raw-weed part of me][spilling the bones of my own fonts, scratched and bent] LOL if I keep going I will haved caressed every phrase in the whole verse AGAIN>Congrad's Light & Love

  1. Date: 10/18/2012 1:16:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win, Nette. Su

  1. Date: 10/16/2012 2:25:00 AM

    ah yes my sweet , the flesh is weak, bones totter forth to greet, but word of key is typing, good poetry exciting, sweet damsel sweet....

  1. Date: 10/15/2012 8:13:00 PM

    I have only the moon...you have the whole Milky Way......

  1. Date: 10/15/2012 8:12:00 PM

    Now I know when you are missing you must be visiting that planet to which you belong...a fabulous write here...enjoyed very much.

  1. Date: 10/15/2012 8:11:00 PM

    Joann, will enjoy this poem..good luck...pd

  1. Date: 10/15/2012 4:13:00 PM

    love the last line the most!

  1. Date: 10/15/2012 4:12:00 PM

    wow, you are amazing, nette!!

  1. Date: 10/15/2012 3:08:00 PM

    Wow simply Wow,, you have reached heights with this amazing piece. Feel I have to write a new one now. A winner just like its poet and creator. Much luv your way Michael

  1. Date: 10/15/2012 2:46:00 PM

    I definetely agree with Arild..Priya you need to be felicitated for your awesome talent...

  1. Date: 10/15/2012 1:40:00 PM

    Wow, the difference between the two verses is monumental, I love the way you have integrated them perfectly my friend! I really enjoyed the intriguing voice you showed throughout this poem! What power you wield within this piece, Great Work Nette!!

  1. Date: 10/15/2012 10:34:00 AM

    Dear nette..am sending you the nobel peace prize.You`ll definitive need it after this spectacular write!:-) Honestly,don`t know how you writers manage these drunken pen poems! Great poem!! Hugs~Arild

  1. Date: 10/15/2012 9:32:00 AM

    A rainbow ink on multilayered parchment of images. It's way out of the ordinary gate!

  1. Date: 10/15/2012 8:49:00 AM

    I know that torturous feeling when all the words are left on a paper trail... A very meandering piece - love it. :-) Su

  1. Date: 10/15/2012 8:26:00 AM

    "as if a 40s band were playing in his head" happens to me all the time! LOL A really great write Nette... love, happy thoughts and big hugs, Jack

  1. Date: 10/15/2012 5:46:00 AM

    Like always - You've hit the nail on the head Nette!! Wish you luck in the contest. - Have a lovely new week! - oxox Anne-Lise :)