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My Pencil Runs

                                                My pencil plays in my hand....

                                       Outside a card house that can barely stand...

                                             I sketch a paper train on the wall...

                                        Watch it travel from in a frame to the hall...

                                      It passes through pictures from one to another...
                                   
                                     From black and white scenes to colors that flutter...
                               
                                            The card house falls as the train pulls in...

                                      And the path of my pencil tears a paper not thin...

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  1. Date: 10/27/2012 7:13:00 PM

    Yowza! Nice one, Michael! How in the world are you?...I haven't been on fb for a while...I am a granny now! hahah....Were u just sitting in your house when u wrote this one? Just staring at the wall?...super cool! :) gwendolen

  1. Date: 10/20/2012 6:57:00 AM

    Wonderful imagination pencilled!

  1. Date: 10/17/2012 9:04:00 AM

    Ahh!..Enjoyed reading your work..If for the contest, winners' circle for sure..Thanks for stopping by..I appreciate your kind review...Sara

  1. Date: 10/17/2012 1:22:00 AM

    hello... i love how you not only stepped outside the box you positively moved in...a great write to inspire and shake up the grey matter...tyvm karen

  1. Date: 10/16/2012 6:00:00 PM

    I have several strong reactions to your poem. It is good. it has more than one layer. It made me smile! Thanks.

  1. Date: 10/16/2012 5:41:00 PM

    Original and entertaining! The images are brilliant!

  1. Date: 10/16/2012 4:02:00 PM

    You have a cool concept going on here, Michael. The ending was a little unexpected for me. Very intriguing. Hey, I think this is one of your better poems!(only my opinion -- maybe, it is one of my favourites of yours because you play between heaviness and light).

  1. Date: 10/16/2012 1:56:00 PM

    The imagery was really cool and imaginative. A very unique write. My favorite type.

  1. Date: 10/16/2012 12:59:00 PM

    A gem you penned here MJF, hope the week ahead is treating you well! Enjoy what is left of your Tuesday ;) love & hugs CTH

  1. Date: 10/16/2012 9:13:00 AM

    Ohh how cool I love a good pencil! Actually haven't had one in a LONG time??? I like a soft lead with lots of yummy black to gray..where are those pencil?? [never mind where are the sharpeners??] Light & Love

  1. Date: 10/16/2012 12:31:00 AM

    A DEEP PASSIONATE WRITE MICHAEL LUV .. A SECRET AFFAIR WITH YOUR PENCIL AND PAPER AND CREATIVE POETRY LUV ..AM SO ENGROSSED IN THESE DELICATE LINES .. U TOUCH THE INNER HIDDEN PART OF ME .. JG IS FASCINATED BY YOUR MAGNIFICENT TALENT .. HUGS FROM ACROSS GW .. LOTS OF X0X0 TOO.

  1. Date: 10/15/2012 11:28:00 PM

    Excellent. Well penned. Tfs

  1. Date: 10/15/2012 5:57:00 PM

    I like this one. it reminds me of those mornings i am sitting there with my pen and paper, and following the thoughts running through my mind. Very nice poem, Michael. So nice to hear from you. Thanks for stopping by my page to read and comment. it's very appreciated. hugs, Catie :)

  1. Date: 10/15/2012 8:59:00 AM

    Hmmm! Andrea is suggesting you write one for a contest called "the drunken pencil" LOL Love it... go for it! Cheers, Jack

  1. Date: 10/15/2012 2:06:00 AM

    savoring the great word usage and the meaning behind your flowing piece, michael... enjoyed!..:) huggs

  1. Date: 10/15/2012 12:42:00 AM

    very nice Michael..enjoy reading it this morning..thank you for your great sharing..have a fabulous day my friend <3<3<3 SK

  1. Date: 10/14/2012 10:08:00 PM

    very nice write friend Michael... i like it :) have a nice day always!!

  1. Date: 10/14/2012 8:25:00 PM

    Hello, Michael stopping by to say hi, and that i miss visiting your poems. Sorry I have not been around in days. I'm having a family trauma.. However, i will fully return in a few days, I'm only stopping by to make sure you do not forget me..JK... About your poem: like Arlid once said...pass your pen around.. i do not mind the teary lines... xox~pd

  1. Date: 10/14/2012 6:10:00 PM

    yes you are a true poet indeed! Good job, JL

  1. Date: 10/14/2012 4:00:00 PM

    you are a true poet Mr. Michael I love it!! cory

  1. Date: 10/14/2012 3:00:00 PM

    Your pencil runs well through this tale...well done !! Thanks for dropping by my page.

  1. Date: 10/14/2012 2:04:00 PM

    It sure must love to be in your hand Michael...

  1. Date: 10/14/2012 12:37:00 PM

    your pencil travels like a thought through a muse...i like this one!

  1. Date: 10/14/2012 12:24:00 PM

    This is a glorious and very meaningful write my friend! I really enjoyed this incredibly delightful and inspiring poem! I love this piece, Great Work!!

  1. Date: 10/14/2012 12:04:00 PM

    Michael very well written my friend, a travelling pencil whatever next, hope you had a good weekend...David

  1. Date: 10/14/2012 11:24:00 AM

    I really like this, Michael. It could be for a contest called the drunken pencil!! Cool idea with it traveling the house!!

  1. Date: 10/14/2012 10:49:00 AM

    Well I hope your pencil doesn't run away! Don't let it run off, Michael! reading this sort of reminds me of that sketch project I saw from before, how this ok my memory fails me, blank booklet is passed around the world, where people sketch sceneries in there. There's something dynamic here, I guess with the fluttering of the colors and that train... I somehow also see that train.... ok I better grab me some sleep now... nice reading this poem that made me imagine, Michael!