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THE FAST

In the darkest hour
I feast upon words of Manna
Which saturate the marrow in my bones
Quietly the night progresses
Not even a sound from creatures
We are aware of thine presence!

Fasting, breaking yoke's
That garment my soul
In a state of submission
Head bowed, standing upon my knees
A sheep bestowing itself
Upon the alter for slaughter
When the sun rise
I will not hunger
For the fulfillment of sacrifice.....

Upon the alter
The sheep bites back
Questioning the importance of
Fasting

The Shepherd speaks,
I deal with you
The way I created you
In my likeness(spirit)
The flesh is strengthened
From worldly sustenance
That I have no use for,
Flesh being crucified
Cornerstones your temple 
With a strong spirit!

"THE FAST" 
For Catie Lindsey's
Rewrite Contest
Scribe Altered 

"THE FAST" original
By, CATIE LINDSEY

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  1. Date: 10/14/2012 10:43:00 PM

    Trial, triumph and tears, the feast of the Fast, the sustenance of souls - very intelligent allegory happening here Scribe - ' the sheep bites back...' I like that fighting spirit - J.A.B. %

  1. Date: 10/11/2012 11:15:00 AM

    Marlon, you got me with this, absolutely love it, now you got me curious as to what write of Catie inspired it. Wishing you all the best for the contest ;) tc Wilma

  1. Date: 10/10/2012 2:59:00 PM

    Teaching discipline and sacrifice. We offer the money it cists for the meals we don't eat to the Lord's church at the time of fast. This money goes to feed the poor among the flock. Another truly inspiring piece. I am fasting this Sabbath for a righteousness leader for this country.

  1. Date: 10/9/2012 3:54:00 AM

    Words really can't express how talented you are Scribe...this is at its best perfornance!!! Excellent choice for the contest...good luck fam!!

    ML Avatar SCRIBE ML Date: 10/9/2012 10:51:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Daaamn, you just rocked me to my core Ink! Just for that inspiration, a piece of paper has to murked! Thanks Fam!
  1. Date: 10/9/2012 2:43:00 AM

    Thank you for sharing "a taste" of your life in this poem. - (a proud father also shares the image of three young ladies) Thanks Marlon - Wishing you and your family a lovely week. :) - oxox love Anne-Lise :)

    ML Avatar SCRIBE ML Date: 10/9/2012 10:49:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks, and well wishes to you and yours!
  1. Date: 10/8/2012 10:27:00 PM

    Scribe, your poem is amazing, the structure and powerful belief you feast upon. Your script and pen are powerful. wish I was,,, By the way, nice graduating picture,,, xox~pd

    ML Avatar SCRIBE ML Date: 10/8/2012 11:03:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks, PD....my 3 daughters, all grown up!
  1. Date: 10/8/2012 10:20:00 PM

    Wow bein a third generation preachers kid I can really appreciate this,This is really inspiring, poetry such as this is what keeps me on the site.

    ML Avatar SCRIBE ML Date: 10/8/2012 11:01:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    That move me in a major way, I appreciate you too!