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Morning Walk - Rewrite

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Morning Walk - Rewrite

I walk a field where flowers yield
sweet pollen to the bees;
their fragrance sweet, I feel complete,
and drop down to my knees.

Humbly, I smell what blossoms tell,
whispering discreetly.
The petals kiss my cheek with bliss,
giving blush quite sweetly.

Bees gather round, and now I've found
I must be on my way;
but, keep the stings and gift me wings...
just like those bees at play.

 Catie Lindsey 9/10/12


Morning Walk

I walk the field where flowers surrender
releasing sweet nectar to hungry bees;
with fragrance so pure my heart does render,
giving way to respectful knees.

Every blossom inflames stale idle air
delivering a scent ever light and rare.
Petals brush my cheeks with delight
as kisses of fresh aroma ignite.

Bees assemble round the colorful bloom
I quickly retreated; gave them some room.
The playful bees can keep their stings
and drink the gift that nature brings.       

Caryl Muzzey 2012

Sixth Place Winner ~ “(Re-write One of My Poems)” Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Catie Lindsey
Nov. 5, 2012

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  1. Date: 11/21/2012 7:24:00 PM
    Both memoriable writes Happy Thanksgiving Light & Love

  1. Date: 11/4/2012 1:50:00 PM
    love this one - so glad it was a winner

  1. Date: 10/23/2012 9:40:00 AM
    an awesome rewrite, of aa awesome poem, does not get much better than this... congrats

  1. Date: 10/23/2012 6:14:00 AM
    Congratulations on your win in Catie's "Re-Write" contest Caryl. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 10/22/2012 5:53:00 AM
    congrats Caryl,beautiful re-write

  1. Date: 10/21/2012 1:15:00 PM
    congrats on your win did a great job with the rewrite

  1. Date: 10/21/2012 9:15:00 AM
    congratulations on your win friend Caryl. cheers!! (^_^)

  1. Date: 10/21/2012 6:40:00 AM
    lovely write, my friend - congrats on all your wins : )

  1. Date: 10/20/2012 9:23:00 PM
    Caryl, congratulations with your win...pd

  1. Date: 10/20/2012 8:12:00 PM
    Congratulations Carl! hugs:)LG

  1. Date: 10/20/2012 12:51:00 PM

  1. Date: 10/20/2012 12:46:00 PM
    Very impressive Caryl..I love it as much as I love the original. congrats. One love, Joy Wells

  1. Date: 10/20/2012 6:54:00 AM
    I love the line: "giving way to respectful knees." The supplication to nature is very evident in this lovely poem. Congratulations on your win, Caryl. Love, Su

  1. Date: 10/20/2012 6:31:00 AM
    Congratulations, Caryl, on your win in my re-write contest. hugs, Catie :)

  1. Date: 10/14/2012 7:53:00 PM
    wow! very nice poem friend Caryl, you rewrite it beautifully! good luck in the contest. thanks for stopping by on my poem. hugs! Maria

  1. Date: 10/14/2012 6:18:00 PM
    Enjoyed reading your work..I like the flow, rhyme, and rhythm of this work..Good luck in Catie's contest..Reads like a winner to me..Sara

  1. Date: 10/14/2012 1:40:00 PM
    Love what you did to a beautiful verse, you beatified it, congrats to the two of you for writing your way through beauty, love and light vie

  1. Date: 10/14/2012 11:30:00 AM
    both poems are very lovely, yours and hers. She inspired you with her art.

  1. Date: 10/7/2012 11:39:00 AM
    very nice poem, thank you for sharing