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Between the Stingers

Trust, like a pitiless whore-master, grins
as between the sheets and at my breasts, he suckles.
Though Cupid lauds' the joy, I feel only stings.

The manic moon shivers to shriek-like violins
as trusting seed is split and son-less my knees buckle
mother-less street urchin blanched, impatient, sin.

In sympathy the sun pales night's mood swings
seeking to caress and hold with a fractured chuckle
love's exhausted, and misspent, ripened lingerings 

To the dying day and I, cry of might-have-beens
ivory white my ice hands, my bleeding knuckles
Trust like a pitiless whore-master grins
Though Cupid lauds' the joy, I feel only stings.
 



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  1. Date: 10/23/2012 6:12:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win in Catie's "Re-Write" contest Debbie. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 10/21/2012 11:24:00 AM

    An excellent write Debbie, congratulations on your win in Catie's contest. I enjoyed the read~ Caryl

  1. Date: 10/21/2012 8:36:00 AM

    very nice poem..congratulations on your win friend Debbie. cheers!! (^_^)

  1. Date: 10/21/2012 6:38:00 AM

    wow, love this one, Debs - congrats on all your wins : )

  1. Date: 10/20/2012 9:17:00 PM

    Dear Lady, , congratulations with your win...pd

  1. Date: 10/20/2012 8:08:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win, Deb! hugs:)LG

  1. Date: 10/20/2012 12:56:00 PM

    CONGRATS DEBBIE ON A TOP TEN WIN FOR THIS AMAZING RE-WRITE OF CATIE'S POEM LUV .. GREAT CHOICE .. GREAT JOB ..

  1. Date: 10/20/2012 12:43:00 PM

    O Wow!! The Great One is at it again. A masterpiece copy of a masterpiece original!! Just Wow! Beautiful Debbie...congrats. One love, joy Wells

  1. Date: 10/20/2012 6:48:00 AM

    Dark, but masterfully executed. One cannot stand indifferent to this powerful write. Congratulations on your win, Debbie. Love, Su

  1. Date: 10/20/2012 6:29:00 AM

    Loved this one, Deb! yep! It seems that you easily grasp what I had put into my version of this poem. Thanks. Congratulations on your win in my re-write contest. hugs, Catie :)

  1. Date: 10/8/2012 8:22:00 AM

    Debbie - the sting of it all brings horrid tears. love, Kathy

  1. Date: 10/6/2012 5:39:00 PM

    nicely written....line 4 is a gem

  1. Date: 10/6/2012 5:27:00 PM

    When darkness leaves you breathless Behold I leave you venus Bright beyond your greatest wish Your gifts to us are priceless

  1. Date: 10/6/2012 5:16:00 PM

    A very well crafted villanelle. I love your ich imagery and word selection. On my haiku, it was the iron work on my old sewing machine that caught the moonlight. Thanks for your comments.